Jack Hammer
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But does it attac?
Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
The SCP Foundation would be proud.
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Perhaps [DATA EXPUNGED] would be a better [REDACTED].
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Hmm, good start. The scene's set well. Aside from the before-mentioned 'protec' typo, I didn't see anything bad, grammar-wise.
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Wait, what typo?
Chekov's hoverbike!
Before I read this, what is the Gore and Horror and tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
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Why don't you check it out and tell me what you think? I would appreciate the input.
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It's intentional.
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You should read Project Oblivion for that.
It's worth it.
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Otherwise, a lotta refs will fly over your head.
When handling security of a situation bad enough, vetting procedures have to take special considerations.
I know this sort of thing is kind of a staple of military sci-fi, but deliberately breaking your new hires with PTSD does not an effective security apparatus make.
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Military sci fi???
I'll have you know this is "Slice of Life!"
HYPE
Oooooookayyy.....
after 2 chapters I can say this is looking really good.
a good chapter I really like it.
The lights went out abruptly, and my room was plunged into pitch blackness. “Oh, crap.”
no this is a huge oh crap!
The ending deserves a Cluster F Bomb.
The cliffhanger this dangles before me is almost enough to taste it in the air.
The plot thickens
shit is getting real.
the next few chapters are going to be interesting.
Wouldn't a light spell be her go-to, being a unicorn and all?
Goddamnit, Mia...
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I guess not, since she walked into a few walls first... Maybe it's like looking for your phone while you're holding it?
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"Darn it where did I put my horn down?!" As a glasses-wearer I can sort-of identify...
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lol!
Sweet celestia !!
A sequel !!
Oh shit.
2 vary good chapters i love them.
so many movie quotes i will not even try to list them grate righting Hammer.
I mean, someone saves your life, you have to sleep with them, right? I'm pretty sure it's in the handbook.
this is a vary unexpected turn of events, new office and new quarters.
this is going to make it so much easier to get more work dune.
PSIONIC ok not going to google that right now as i need way more coffee.
but this defiantly sounds like a shit storm is going to happen.
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Psionic means having psychic ability. Telepthy, telekinesis, suggestion, outright mind control, and other esoteric abilities. It means it's a bad day.
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aww OK and thinks.
For all those who dont know what Protec is....its the name of the company they work for
Ooh, shite.
well shit this is not a good thing at all.
a really good chapter with a awesome cliffhanger.
They really do need to work on their containment protocols for stuff like that.
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Well remember it's not exactly an established and well planned setup. It's put hurriedly together under pressure to do a job noone has ever had to do before. Mistakes will be made.
_____I've been waiting some time for this.
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Hey! Good to see you here :)
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-cafe/thread/308771/reviews#comment/6146147
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The dumbest of those criticisms was the apparent "grammar issues". It's literally flawless.
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Thank you!
I do notice a lack of any examples whatsoever as well...
Ohhhhhhhhhhhh, I got a bad feeling about this.
ok being shipped off to the main land, i wounder just what the trio will get up to.
The amount of sex in this story is starting to get annoying.