Okay, this was an idea born of one late night of insomnia, and I think it's time to put this one to rest. This story will come to a close within the next one or two chapters, with possibility for a sequel dealing with a full-blown romance. There's a bit of implied romance for this one, but I'm hoping to actually flesh that out in the sequel.
An interesting concept, as I have stated before I am not especially fond of clopfics, however the description drew me in and I found the plight of the main character a worthy one. In most cases Estrus is used a cheap excuse for the clop to begin, however here it appears as a genuine problem, the main six are ashamed of what they have done and seek to make amends for it. The OC is interesting and his problems actually effect and influence the plot. I am looking to the next chapter, and I would hope to see how some of the mares are dealing with having essentially gang raped someone. The way that Rainbow Dash has dealt with it seems to be pointed objectification, probably to avoid having to admit what she did in manner that is very much in character for her, while the other main six are dealing with varying degrees of remorse. It has already been established that Colgate is at the very least aware what she did was wrong, and would be interesting to see how the normally chipper ponies and their male friends and family deal with such a thing. Another question I would like answered; did Linen suffer any psychical injuries or infections as a result of his ordeal?
I look forward to seeing how the main six explain this to Linens' sister. BlackWinter
did Linen suffer any psychical injuries or infections as a result of his ordeal?
I'm not entirely sure what you mean by this. Do you mean if he has some sort of medical affliction? Or do you just mean that he has trauma in general?
Aside from that, thank you for your thoughts on the story. I very much enjoy receiving feedback, if not at least to let me know what the reader is thinking.
1667149 His mental issues are quite obvious, though given his history I would have expected him to be utterly broken the sight of one of his attackers. What I meant was, did his suffer any kind of harm to his body, injuries, or suffer from some of STI as a due to lack of protection? It would seem likely given how much strain his body was under at the time. I also wonder if the poor stallion would even be able have a normal relationship after all this, not because of physical issues but because of how his first time went. That kind of thing leaves an impact on ones mind after all. Could be an avenue to explore.
Awaiting the next installment with anticipation BlackWinter
Edit:Actually Linen already has shown some mental issues that I missed before; the shame when he saw his sister, many rape victims blame themselves for what happened, given Linens' disposition I found it odd that he would be willing to be so close to the main six after what happened. Is this because he sees himself at fault rather than them? Interesting
1667282 Good points on all of them. In the end, though, I think I may just focus on Linen's mental side of things, as ponies have shown themselves to be quite a hardy species (Rainbow Dash injures her wing and is already healed within the span of a day is some evidence of this), and it was mostly my original intent to do so. For your edit, you are correct: Linen is not given to harboring things against other ponies, and does see himself for being at fault even though it was simply a "wrong place at the wrong time" sort of unforeseeable situation.
That said, this entire story is a product of taking a single spontaneous idea and running with it. I do have intentions on developing a sequel that delves into romance, but whether or not this story or parts of it will be mentioned in it, only time will tell when I actually get to working on it.
Okay, this was an idea born of one late night of insomnia, and I think it's time to put this one to rest. This story will come to a close within the next one or two chapters, with possibility for a sequel dealing with a full-blown romance. There's a bit of implied romance for this one, but I'm hoping to actually flesh that out in the sequel.
Silk Weave: You got some explaning to dooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great story keep it up.
Iz like this one...
i wonder how much of a berserker button Silk has
Hmmm FUCK
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You Should Have Ran With the Rest Linen You Should Have And You wouldn't be chest deep in shit
1366026 Elements,
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1372820
Exactly.
Where dos that line come from?
Heard it before never known where it originated.
1372820 Oh, you read this? I didn't know you did.
1373356 I'd think the picture should give it away: it's from I Love Lucy, or at least, I believe it is.
1373361
Sorry.
I'm from Denmark and have no prior knowledge of I Love Lucy.
Just heard the line a lot of diffrent places like Kim Possinle and other shows using it.
1373361 Course I read it. I've been taking my time, but I intend to get to all the stuff you've written. Eventually.
I need an update on this!
An interesting concept, as I have stated before I am not especially fond of clopfics, however the description drew me in and I found the plight of the main character a worthy one. In most cases Estrus is used a cheap excuse for the clop to begin, however here it appears as a genuine problem, the main six are ashamed of what they have done and seek to make amends for it. The OC is interesting and his problems actually effect and influence the plot.
I am looking to the next chapter, and I would hope to see how some of the mares are dealing with having essentially gang raped someone. The way that Rainbow Dash has dealt with it seems to be pointed objectification, probably to avoid having to admit what she did in manner that is very much in character for her, while the other main six are dealing with varying degrees of remorse. It has already been established that Colgate is at the very least aware what she did was wrong, and would be interesting to see how the normally chipper ponies and their male friends and family deal with such a thing. Another question I would like answered; did Linen suffer any psychical injuries or infections as a result of his ordeal?
I look forward to seeing how the main six explain this to Linens' sister.
BlackWinter
I'm not entirely sure what you mean by this. Do you mean if he has some sort of medical affliction? Or do you just mean that he has trauma in general?
Aside from that, thank you for your thoughts on the story. I very much enjoy receiving feedback, if not at least to let me know what the reader is thinking.
1667149
His mental issues are quite obvious, though given his history I would have expected him to be utterly broken the sight of one of his attackers. What I meant was, did his suffer any kind of harm to his body, injuries, or suffer from some of STI as a due to lack of protection? It would seem likely given how much strain his body was under at the time.
I also wonder if the poor stallion would even be able have a normal relationship after all this, not because of physical issues but because of how his first time went. That kind of thing leaves an impact on ones mind after all. Could be an avenue to explore.
Awaiting the next installment with anticipation
BlackWinter
Edit:Actually Linen already has shown some mental issues that I missed before; the shame when he saw his sister, many rape victims blame themselves for what happened, given Linens' disposition I found it odd that he would be willing to be so close to the main six after what happened. Is this because he sees himself at fault rather than them? Interesting
1667282 Good points on all of them. In the end, though, I think I may just focus on Linen's mental side of things, as ponies have shown themselves to be quite a hardy species (Rainbow Dash injures her wing and is already healed within the span of a day is some evidence of this), and it was mostly my original intent to do so. For your edit, you are correct: Linen is not given to harboring things against other ponies, and does see himself for being at fault even though it was simply a "wrong place at the wrong time" sort of unforeseeable situation.
That said, this entire story is a product of taking a single spontaneous idea and running with it. I do have intentions on developing a sequel that delves into romance, but whether or not this story or parts of it will be mentioned in it, only time will tell when I actually get to working on it.