A guy goes to Con dressed as his favorite character, Kenichi Shirahama, and gets sent to Equestria with a few small changes... HE HAS A TAIL?! O.o ( Looks to friend) why wasn't I told about the change in the script?
Great chapter, to bad about the changelings being parasitic, but then I guess you had to find a reason for conflict with ponies somewhere. You could have had the changelings be a 4th race of ponies that were completely ostracized and removed from history during the events before the unification. Like say they lived along side the crystal ponies as guards/citizens of the empire and once the other races of ponies find the empire they chase the 'monsters' away and once they find out they're diet they label them as actual monsters and say that they were controlling the crystal ponies minds for their abundant love... Or something along those lines.
Great chapter, but there's a problem. All of the images after the first three are dead, possibly due to formatting errors, possibly due to the source, i.e.- the Dragonball Wiki.
Awsome chapter. I was geting antsy waiting for it. Though in my opinion Kenichi dispached the changelings too easely for beeing at 35-40% of power. But he is half saiyan so i can let it slide.
But! There are two points in the chapter i don't agree with.
Number 1: You explained a vitall plot point of the chapter in the author coment secction. I'm talking about the giving of vital energy (ki) as part of the wedding seremony. By the end of the chapter we got the idea that the battle in the coliseum came in order to find a mate for Crysalis, but we did't know that giving her energy was also part of the equation. We shoud have that explained in the next chapter when Kenichi inevitably questions Crysalis on why they are married, wich might follow Crysalis looking sad at Kenichi for not liking her, in wich Crysalis using her womanly alure to suker-punch Kenichi in accepting her as his wife, with an explanation as to the history of the battle and meaning behing the energy transfer. Sigh "I so do not like spoilers." }
Number 22: While i know that Kenichi's teachers beat martial arts in to his body to the point that he can fight while unconscious. I think going super saiyan in the equivalent of sleeping is too much.
8430818 Thanks for the input. It's helps me work things out. I like what you came up with for why it should've waiied till next chapter to be said about the Ki giving as a binding thing, it's a great idea. But... I know what's going to happen next and I write these chapter with that in mind.
Also, at the end his Brain practically broke when she said they were married, Whose to say he'll remember most of it?
And he didn't turn Super Saiyan. I'll admit that right now, and I quote myself.
8430832 Yes, now that i look back you never stated that his hair turned yellow. But everything else in the description screams super saiyan. so i gues it's both our fault.
8430866 but thanks for telling me it's was a movie. I'm a fan of Dragon Ball but I don't know everything about it nor have I been able to watch all of it. so input helps.
One a month heavy sigh well at least it's a 11/10 story so far so worth the wait but I hate waiting any one know the time kais number want to call in a favor 😁
... She looks so adorable I think I need a new heart.
Pseudo super saiyan.
Well, maybe they can evolve to be more symbiotic?
Hah, be happy, mam, you have your own bughorse waifu!
Nice chapter, though I'm surprised he went straight to killing. I'd though he'd do his best to take his opponents down without killing, especially that other than Bile, the other changelings didn't do anything to Chryssie.
What I think would fit more is him trying to use debilitating attacks to take them down fast, breaking bones and blasting them with energy, trying not to kill them, but probably overdoing it while compensating for his weakened state in some cases or simply killing a few due to not knowing where to hit them safely due to their different anatomy. That way he'd still feel guilty for killing some, but It'd be much less jarring than it is now, where he simply goes mortal Kombat on them all with no second thoughts whatsoever. Hell, it's actually Bile that he kills almost accidentally, while the rest he straight out executes, and it's Bile I think he would be pissed enough at to kill.
All in all, him just killing so many without seemingly even trying to just take them out without killing feels rather off to me. Especially that we see Bile take out a changeling by breaking his jaw and knocking him out without killing him.
8432998 He new this was a death match and it would have to end as such. and while your right, he'd rather talk things out instead of fight first, he will not hesitate to remove a threat if it won't stand down.
8433029 Actually, I don't think anyone mentioned outright that it was a deathmatch and some of the participants were eliminated without being killed, that's why I think his behaviour seems off. Adding the Queen outright stating that it's to the death when she speaks to the participants and the crowd in the area and changing the wording for Bile's 'jawbreaker' attack so that it doesn't knock his opponent out and instead outright kills him (eg. changing it to an uppercut that breaks the jaw and jams it up into the brain) would fix the confusion.
8438179 I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it and I'm glad the fight scene came out good. I'm always worried that it's come out bland or boring. I hope you laughed at the end, when I played the Jon Tron video and imagined that was how Kenichi said it I couldn't stop laughing.
Mog I loved this chapter.......MORE
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You will get more. I don't plan on stopping this crazy train anytime soon. And I'm glad you enjoyed it. Let's me know I'm doing good.
Doing good at being average.
Your just an idiot Beta.
Well I am you, so what does that mean?
That's what I thought.
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Great chapter, to bad about the changelings being parasitic, but then I guess you had to find a reason for conflict with ponies somewhere. You could have had the changelings be a 4th race of ponies that were completely ostracized and removed from history during the events before the unification. Like say they lived along side the crystal ponies as guards/citizens of the empire and once the other races of ponies find the empire they chase the 'monsters' away and once they find out they're diet they label them as actual monsters and say that they were controlling the crystal ponies minds for their abundant love... Or something along those lines.
8430620
That's not a bad idea. But for my story it wouldn't work to well. Still a good idea though.
Great chapter, but there's a problem. All of the images after the first three are dead, possibly due to formatting errors, possibly due to the source, i.e.- the Dragonball Wiki.
Awsome chapter. I was geting antsy waiting for it.
Though in my opinion Kenichi dispached the changelings too easely for beeing at 35-40% of power. But he is half saiyan so i can let it slide.
But! There are two points in the chapter i don't agree with.
Number 1: You explained a vitall plot point of the chapter in the author coment secction. I'm talking about the giving of vital energy (ki) as part of the wedding seremony.
By the end of the chapter we got the idea that the battle in the coliseum came in order to find a mate for Crysalis, but we did't know that giving her energy was also part of the equation. We shoud have that explained in the next chapter when Kenichi inevitably questions Crysalis on why they are married, wich might follow Crysalis looking sad at Kenichi for not liking her, in wich Crysalis using her womanly alure to suker-punch Kenichi in accepting her as his wife, with an explanation as to the history of the battle and meaning behing the energy transfer.
Sigh "I so do not like spoilers." }
Number 22: While i know that Kenichi's teachers beat martial arts in to his body to the point that he can fight while unconscious. I think going super saiyan in the equivalent of sleeping is too much.
8430818
Thanks for the input. It's helps me work things out. I like what you came up with for why it should've waiied till next chapter to be said about the Ki giving as a binding thing, it's a great idea. But... I know what's going to happen next and I write these chapter with that in mind.
Also, at the end his Brain practically broke when she said they were married, Whose to say he'll remember most of it?
And he didn't turn Super Saiyan. I'll admit that right now, and I quote myself.
8430815
Damn! People have been saying that and I don't know how to fix it. I'll try to figure something out, sorry for the annoyance.
8430832
Yes, now that i look back you never stated that his hair turned yellow. But everything else in the description screams super saiyan.
so i gues it's both our fault.
8430855
In the dragon ball Slug saga, Goku goes through the same thing Kenichi does, so not quite.
8430859
In my defence te Sulg saga is not a saga. it's a movie. And as we all nerds know movies are not canon to the main series.
8430866
Tell that to pokemon nerds. I did that once... I don't remeber anything after that.
8430866
but thanks for telling me it's was a movie. I'm a fan of Dragon Ball but I don't know everything about it nor have I been able to watch all of it. so input helps.
Amazing, Wonderful. Bravo. Now I have to wait for the next chapter...hopefully it doesn't take too long. Keep up the good work.
8430883
I'm gonna try to post one every month. there's no set day but you can expect one to be there every month.
8430883
And I'm glad you liked it. that makes me happy.
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8430885
Your welcome and okay then. Just wondering cause a friend of mine takes...well almost forever to write chapters
8430946
I know the feeling and I don't want others to feel like that with my stuff if I can help it.
One a month heavy sigh well at least it's a 11/10 story so far so worth the wait but I hate waiting any one know the time kais number want to call in a favor 😁
8431103
If I can I'll post it sooner but no promises. and what an 11/10 story? I don't know that term.
8430949
That's good. Thank you.
8431132
you are very welcome.
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8431228
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! Thank you for that.
OOOOOOO A CLOP SCENE NEXT CHAPTER I'LL GET THE POPCORN AND THE BINOCULARS!!!
8431274
I prefer Twizzlers.
8431106
Mean scale of 1 to 10 it's a 11
Yay, best bughorse!
... She looks so adorable I think I need a new heart.
Pseudo super saiyan.
Well, maybe they can evolve to be more symbiotic?
Hah, be happy, mam, you have your own bughorse waifu!
Nice chapter, though I'm surprised he went straight to killing. I'd though he'd do his best to take his opponents down without killing, especially that other than Bile, the other changelings didn't do anything to Chryssie.
What I think would fit more is him trying to use debilitating attacks to take them down fast, breaking bones and blasting them with energy, trying not to kill them, but probably overdoing it while compensating for his weakened state in some cases or simply killing a few due to not knowing where to hit them safely due to their different anatomy. That way he'd still feel guilty for killing some, but It'd be much less jarring than it is now, where he simply goes mortal Kombat on them all with no second thoughts whatsoever. Hell, it's actually Bile that he kills almost accidentally, while the rest he straight out executes, and it's Bile I think he would be pissed enough at to kill.
All in all, him just killing so many without seemingly even trying to just take them out without killing feels rather off to me. Especially that we see Bile take out a changeling by breaking his jaw and knocking him out without killing him.
8432998
He new this was a death match and it would have to end as such. and while your right, he'd rather talk things out instead of fight first, he will not hesitate to remove a threat if it won't stand down.
8433029 Actually, I don't think anyone mentioned outright that it was a deathmatch and some of the participants were eliminated without being killed, that's why I think his behaviour seems off. Adding the Queen outright stating that it's to the death when she speaks to the participants and the crowd in the area and changing the wording for Bile's 'jawbreaker' attack so that it doesn't knock his opponent out and instead outright kills him (eg. changing it to an uppercut that breaks the jaw and jams it up into the brain) would fix the confusion.
8433725
they started slaughtering each other from the start... I don't think any one would look at that and say it's not a death match.
I fully approve of this ship. Also, I love this chapter. It felt like I was reading DBZ/Super. Good job on this one Quirky.
8438179
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it and I'm glad the fight scene came out good. I'm always worried that it's come out bland or boring. I hope you laughed at the end, when I played the Jon Tron video and imagined that was how Kenichi said it I couldn't stop laughing.
8438179
also...
to much?
8438498
I don’t think it’s too much. *shrug*
8438755
just for you.
8438770
Oh my god yes!
8438780
it's almost as goo as FARTKNOCKER!
8438785
You find that much funnier than I do.
8438788
cause I keep seeing that video in my head every time I say it. so my mind is going through the whole list.
8438793
Do I need to repost the best insult ever?
8438800
no I've been memerizing that one in my spare time.
8438808
So you can destroy someone with it?
8438811
yep. that and the elder swear, almost got that down pat.
8438816
What’s the elder swear?
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8438856
wtf?
8438865
have you never watched Poter puppet pals?
8438870
Not that one.
8438872
well I'm glad to have been the first to show it to you.