Trixie unexpectedly visits Luna, who must scramble to accomodate her. The visit is special, so Luna wants to get it just right. Getting a visitor on the moon is rare after all.
To be fair, it's a star on a wand. And you have an auspicious name, too. Celestia, at least, clearly puts stock in those (Cough Sunset Shimmer Cough Twilight Sparkle cough personal student theme cough).
Heh, alright! I'm happy to see a couple of updates to this story. I'm curious to see how far you can carry this with no plan long term plan.
I think you might regret doing this chapter reveal before setting up much more tension on the moon, but I'm sure I'll be surprised. Honestly, I really liked the previous chapter (although I didn't comment on it directly) and I think some of your strongest points have been in character interaction. Luna is pretty sufficiently creepy. Personally I think she is right in the zone of pitiable and off putting. Her constant need for validation is interesting and could lead to some very unfortunate moments of doubt strikes at a bad time, haha.
Right now it looks like this story will live our die on the interrelationship between Trixie and Luna. There isn't a whole lot of mystery left with the reveal of how Trixie got to the moon, so teasing the readers along with pieces won't work (I think?) but I'm curious to see what happens!
Best guess right now is that tension will come from unwanted advances from Luna to Trixie and possibly Trixie fearing for her life. It seems kinda bleak, though, since she is kinda in the mother of bad spots.
Mmm... One interesting turns might be if it turns out that Trixie was only temporarily sent to the moon because of the botched spell and when Luna realizes this she tries to trick Trixie into staying in a number of ways. Maybe she initially uses her alicorn powers to manually and forcibly keep her new companion but maybe as outside forces pull Trixie back (ponies attempting to resummon her without knowing the situation) Luna is either required to pull harder (maybe causing harm to Trixie), trick or convince Trixie to perform some act to bind HERSELF to the moon (basically the Trixie "I'll stay with you forever" ending) or do something else to keep Trixie around as company (give in just a LITTLE BIT to the nightmare? Leave a big image on the moon telling the ponies to quit it?). Bonus points if Trixie is successfully resummoned back to Equestria temporarily at times when she is making progress with Luna causing Luna to lose faith that Trixie is real. Lol
Still, however the story goes, I'm curious to see where you take it. Thank you for continuing and good luck!
I'm curious to see how far you can carry this with no plan long term plan.
You and me both. I do have an ending figured out at least, at least the main idea of one.
Right now it looks like this story will live our die on the interrelationship between Trixie and Luna. There isn't a whole lot of mystery left with the reveal of how Trixie got to the moon, so teasing the readers along with pieces won't work (I think?) but I'm curious to see what happens!
Yep, it was always meant to be a interaction piece, I had no plans on keeping any real mystery parts. It's just a silly idea I had to keep me writing and also experiment on getting over my own embarrassment issues of writing sensual and clop pieces. When I did the make out scene between Flutters and Discord in Hopes and Follies I felt incredibly awkward, so if I can get over that I can work on making better sincere and sweet scenes as well. Or so I feel.
Though I am going to try, I may not get a chapter out tomorrow, I just started a college class this week and am working to adjust it into my life, but we'll see how I manage.
Okay, we finally get an answer to everything we wanted to know.
So they've been sending her dead bodies. Those probably weren't as much fun to play with.
To be fair, it's a star on a wand. And you have an auspicious name, too. Celestia, at least, clearly puts stock in those (Cough Sunset Shimmer Cough Twilight Sparkle cough personal student theme cough).
Heh, alright! I'm happy to see a couple of updates to this story. I'm curious to see how far you can carry this with no plan long term plan.
I think you might regret doing this chapter reveal before setting up much more tension on the moon, but I'm sure I'll be surprised. Honestly, I really liked the previous chapter (although I didn't comment on it directly) and I think some of your strongest points have been in character interaction. Luna is pretty sufficiently creepy. Personally I think she is right in the zone of pitiable and off putting. Her constant need for validation is interesting and could lead to some very unfortunate moments of doubt strikes at a bad time, haha.
Right now it looks like this story will live our die on the interrelationship between Trixie and Luna. There isn't a whole lot of mystery left with the reveal of how Trixie got to the moon, so teasing the readers along with pieces won't work (I think?) but I'm curious to see what happens!
Best guess right now is that tension will come from unwanted advances from Luna to Trixie and possibly Trixie fearing for her life. It seems kinda bleak, though, since she is kinda in the mother of bad spots.
Mmm... One interesting turns might be if it turns out that Trixie was only temporarily sent to the moon because of the botched spell and when Luna realizes this she tries to trick Trixie into staying in a number of ways. Maybe she initially uses her alicorn powers to manually and forcibly keep her new companion but maybe as outside forces pull Trixie back (ponies attempting to resummon her without knowing the situation) Luna is either required to pull harder (maybe causing harm to Trixie), trick or convince Trixie to perform some act to bind HERSELF to the moon (basically the Trixie "I'll stay with you forever" ending) or do something else to keep Trixie around as company (give in just a LITTLE BIT to the nightmare? Leave a big image on the moon telling the ponies to quit it?). Bonus points if Trixie is successfully resummoned back to Equestria temporarily at times when she is making progress with Luna causing Luna to lose faith that Trixie is real. Lol
Still, however the story goes, I'm curious to see where you take it. Thank you for continuing and good luck!
Pretty interesting so far. Setting it before canon events changes a few things, since Trixie doesn't have the same emotional baggage.
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You and me both. I do have an ending figured out at least, at least the main idea of one.
Yep, it was always meant to be a interaction piece, I had no plans on keeping any real mystery parts. It's just a silly idea I had to keep me writing and also experiment on getting over my own embarrassment issues of writing sensual and clop pieces. When I did the make out scene between Flutters and Discord in Hopes and Follies I felt incredibly awkward, so if I can get over that I can work on making better sincere and sweet scenes as well. Or so I feel.
Though I am going to try, I may not get a chapter out tomorrow, I just started a college class this week and am working to adjust it into my life, but we'll see how I manage.
As always, thanks for the comments!
Kinda hoping those cultists get the book thrown at them. Figuratively and literally. This explains things.
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Forget throwing the book, they need to be beaten upside the head with it.
Exciting.
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playing that right now actually. Being a Rogue Trader is fun.
Well.
That explains a bit.