Quite good so far, but "SNIKT!"? I'm not sure that's the sound of metal blades penetrating soft flash? the KT make it more sound like bones scraping at each other, or so. Just a thought of myself.
With Characters like her, I actually always expect them to run away and to be wary about the ponys, after that some curious ponys to try finding them, then they start talking.
Not bad, I really enjoyed it anyway, just some random thought I had again. I thinkg I'm going to enjoy this story pretty much.
Well that is the sound effect that the comics use when Logan pops his. It is one of the two sound effects that is distinctly Marvel. The other is from our friendly neighborhood Spider-Man.
The second was a number: 23. There was some level of significance to this number. Her age? A quick look at herself told her she was at least in that range or close to it.
Okay, so she's in her twenties I guess.
At her full height, she appeared to be as tall as herself, or any ordinary pony.
... How big are these ponies!? How short is Lauren for a 20 year old!?
Quite good so far, but "SNIKT!"? I'm not sure that's the sound of metal blades penetrating soft flash? the KT make it more sound like bones scraping at each other, or so. Just a thought of myself.
KO awesome chapter, looks like the Stallion is gonna learn not to mess with this Wolverine and what she does isn't very nice.
With Characters like her, I actually always expect them to run away and to be wary about the ponys, after that some curious ponys to try finding them, then they start talking.
Not bad, I really enjoyed it anyway, just some random thought I had again. I thinkg I'm going to enjoy this story pretty much.
I need more!!
Curse you cliffhanger!!
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Well that is the sound effect that the comics use when Logan pops his. It is one of the two sound effects that is distinctly Marvel. The other is from our friendly neighborhood Spider-Man.
8051832 You mean thwip?
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Uh oh you done ####ed up now
Okay, so she's in her twenties I guess.
... How big are these ponies!? How short is Lauren for a 20 year old!?