Rarity has had very few suitors in her day that lasted longer than a fleeting moment. When a strange creature shows up in equestria and pursues her she turns him away but what happens when he suddenly becomes the thing she wants and the tables turn?
And FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA is AAAALLLLIIIIINN with the mothafuckin' HOOOOOOOOOOREEEEE A- *Smack*
Okay we sane now.
Anyway, this story kinda went wayward for me. I like the theme of pain and hurt and while I don't particularly fancy the Prench Whorse arc, I found it to be a bit to short to be considered a proper bout of 'conflict'. It seemed short, kinda rushed. Though the story in itself flows, this route is a bit lackluster.
I saw little to no buildup, leading to low payoff, and primarily lack of conflict to drive the reader to continue.
Make no mistake the flow for this story is smooth and in a sense makes up for the lack of structure but at the same time it doesn't.
It was a nice read though, so I'll but this with my 4star fanfic shelf.
Goodnight everybody
I intend to see this through to the end.
Woooo!!! I've been waiting for this to update.
update
Buck I caught up.
Hell yes!! So glad to see this updy! I beg of you PLEASE don't let this next update go on as long! Thank you for a amazing story.
I'd almost assumed I wouldn't see another update for this, happy to see another chapter! Huzzah!
And FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
is AAAALLLLIIIIINN with the mothafuckin' HOOOOOOOOOOREEEEE
A-
*Smack*
Okay we sane now.
Anyway, this story kinda went wayward for me. I like the theme of pain and hurt and while I don't particularly fancy the Prench Whorse arc, I found it to be a bit to short to be considered a proper bout of 'conflict'. It seemed short, kinda rushed. Though the story in itself flows, this route is a bit lackluster.
I saw little to no buildup, leading to low payoff, and primarily lack of conflict to drive the reader to continue.
Make no mistake the flow for this story is smooth and in a sense makes up for the lack of structure but at the same time it doesn't.
It was a nice read though, so I'll but this with my 4star fanfic shelf.
Aribaderchi