As i awoke i smelled coffee
That's weird mum hates coffee..
I decided to open my eyes.
A library? My town doesn't have a library..
The thing i saw next startled me.
What seemed to be a small-childlike dragon walked down the stairs to my right.
What in the...
I quickly closed my eyes and feigned sleep
"Twilight, that thing Rainbow dash captured is still asleep." I guessed that was the dragon.
"Just leave him Spike, he will wake up eventually." This was Twilight then
I decided to be bold and open my eyes.
"Uh. Twilight.. He is awake now!" Spike announced.
A purple pony looking thing walked down from the stairs the dragon walked down from and looked at me.
Is that a unicorn? Wow..
She approached where i was laying down which was apparently a sofa.
Fear began to spread across my body once again as the unicorn presumably 'Twilight' Stood a meter away from the sofa i was laying on.
Silence was everywhere as we just stared at each other.
In a attempt to break the silence the dragon, presumably 'Spike' approached too and asked me "What are you?"
I thought about this for a moment. What do i say? Should i be angry? I know what i am but would they even know what a human was?
My thought was once again cut short by Spike asking me another question "Can you speak?"
I decided it was best to answer him. "Yeah.. I can speak. An I'm a Human."
Twilight and Spike both jumped back quite far actually as i spoke.
"What? i didn't do anything!" I said, confused.
"Y-Your teeth." Spike replied
Oh yeah! My K-Nines! Oh wait.
"I'm not going to eat you. Don't be scared of me." i reassured.
To be honest im more scared of you..
The unicorn approached me again. And with some kind of Telekinetic power she lifted the cover that was on me.
"So your bi-pedal then. That explains your height but why do you need those teeth?" She asked.
I sighed. "I eat meat. Our schools say that if you don't get enough 'Protein' , that's a thing that comes out of meat when you digest it, you become un-healthy." I explained.
"So you aren't going to eat us?" Spike said worryingly.
"Don't be silly spike. Anyway i could just lift him up and move him away" She said while tapping her horn.
I instantly remembered that show that my sister always watched when she was younger. 'My little Pony' it was called. he had saw clips of it while walking passed the TV and saw that she could lift things.
"So. Why did you bring me here?" I asked her the all-important question.
46096 You Obviously haven't read Whiplash or New Beginnings. they are BOTH good human in Equestria fics
I know you said that the updates were going to be frequent but that meant that they would be short.
However if you do it this way you are going to end up with 20+ chapters before actually getting anywhere.
That is if you write with sufficient detail and don't simply speed through a plot which would ruin it btw.
Still from what I've read so far the story shows promise, keep on truckin.
Yeah you should make them longer, 1000 characters will give the bronies a good read.
Yes, I agree completely. If you condensed the three chapters you have into one chapter, it'd give us something a bit meatier to get our teeth into. Don't go crazy: 1,000 words should be enough. 10,000? Save that for an epic one-shot or something. I still think I go a little overboard when I upload chapters of 5,000 or more.
Anyway, you have more writing skill than I did at 14. My English Literature came out at a C, and I was really happy with that; stuff like Maths and Science I managed A*s and As right through (heck, even German I got an A in).
Just pad out your stories a bit more; we don't mind waiting a little while for something good, and we'd rather wait for something good than be bombarded with something mediocre or bad. Not saying yours is bad, but it could do with some work: read some of the more well-known fics on here and try to pick up a few things that they do and you don't (or that you do and they don't). Keep at it, and you'll see improvement eventually; that should raise your ratings and reviews, and hopefully you'll aim to meet the new standards. If you do it right, it's a constant cycle of improvement until you give up.
46909 kk then
Do you guys want me to Un-Publish All three and make them into one or just extend the Up-coming ones?
Right well im going to go with the latter. Expect new chapters soon