i can say you have made me a vary happy pony with this chapter for one reason ( Thestral )
you have really started pulling this story together in so many ways and it work so good.
happy writing.

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Thank you! Stellar's always had a special relationship with Thestrals, being Luna's apprentice in several of her lifetimes. She's been known to patrol through Canterlot's streets and alleys with several platoons of them on occasion, looking for trouble. And she sympathises with them, too; that wasn't the first time she's changed into a Thestral alicorn to have them realise she supports and regards them very highly (as Cimmerian alludes to...). She once scared the bejeebies out of Twilight by changing and scaring her awake in bed (Twilight was NOT impressed).

Well. I was prepared to put this story down after the first two chapters... But after reading what you had to say about my criticisms, you convinced me to keep reading... And here i am on chapter 12. This is a good story. Only one criticism so far. The break at the very end of the chapter is completely unnecessary. You can just consider the end of the chapter as the break. But thats it. Thats my only criticism. Great story! Keep it up!

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Only one criticism so far. The break at the very end of the chapter is completely unnecessary. You can just consider the end of the chapter as the break. But that's it. That's my only criticism.

Ah. That's the result of me writing everything in one file. As I reach a point I think makes a good chapter-break, I cut-and-paste them to individual files, and sometimes that gets left behind. I'll remove them.

Great story! Keep it up!

Thank you very much!