Discord's been naughty. Stellar gets involved, but can she make a difference on an alien world?
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Okay...finished the second chapter. You had a formatting issue, more than half the chapter is in italics. I'd strongly suggest addressing that.
The chapter itself was confusing, the pacing is still extremely fast, and it's one long exposition dump. The first chapter had some decent action and brought the story along. Not so much here. I want to like this story, bit you are making it hard. And I will tell you something that's been told to me multiple times, a good editor is a must.