Great work so far I would really like to read how it began. Nicely done with the names. How when and why needs still anwsering how she landed on Equis, how she has kids... When does your story begin And are the ponies normal or Anthro? You have not very many desciptions of the ponies in your text. All in all very good, Makes hungry for more Apples ?
Word of advice: deleting comments doesn't help your story at all. If anything, it makes it worse.
7859102 Hey deleting comments that have nothing to do with the story but the cover art. I don't think it will hurt it that much.
Other then a few typo's i would like to read more..
Great work so far
I would really like to read how it began.
Nicely done with the names.
How when and why needs still anwsering how she landed on Equis, how she has kids...
When does your story begin
And are the ponies normal or Anthro?
You have not very many desciptions of the ponies in your text.
All in all very good, Makes hungry for more Apples ?
8153076 The second chapter will explain all of that and the ponies are normal, not anthros.
I always enjoy reading FIE stories. Yours is off to a good start.