In the last meeting of the day, Celestia secretly teases Luna's privates in front of everybody. Luna can't help but squirm on her seat, enduring her sister's loving caresses with a sly grin. When their day ends, Luna drags Celestia to her bedroom.
Do you realize, The Abyss, that it's come to the point where I don't even read the story synopsis anymore? I just start reading the first chapter? You're so good that I already know I'm going to like it before I've read word one.
7692069 Heh, will do! Another chapter should be coming out in a few days or so, or maybe sometime early next week. And THAT'S where the fun really begins!
7692234 You talking about the cover art? Or talking about the story itself? Because there are lots of butts. Big, sexy butts temporarily clothed in both cute and sexy panties.
7692259 From my experience, it's typically pure context. It's funny how many stories you'll see with high dislike/like ratios and then all the comments will be glowingly positive.
7692263 Yeah, well, some people choose not to leave a comment saying why they disliked it because they don't want to get into an argument where nobody wins. Everyone assumes they are right, so when an unstoppable force meets an unmovable wall, nothing really goes anywhere.
he finished with a single stomp of his foot on the marble floor.
I just realized you are going with plantigrade anthropomorphic horses instead of unguligrade. Good choice. More toes to work with.
you probably would have made me cream my panties!
The guards are right there. Show a little decorum, you nympho.
Tis a pity...
"'Tis" needs an apostrophe before it.
It had absolutely no wires that would poke her in places she’d rather not be poked in,
"Poke her in places in which she'd rather not be poked".
I like this story. I really do. However, Celestia and Luna do not seem very anthropomorphic to me. You do not mention their wings or their tails at all in this chapter. They also do not have the fur coats that most anthros have. In fact, the only thing pony about them are their horns. You even gave them feet instead of hooves. Which, like I said, is great. More toes to work with. However, they seem more human than not. Which is a good thing if you are going for humanized, but you are going for anthro. In following chapters, try to remember to incorporate their wings and tails and their soft, furry coats.
"Poke her in places in which she'd rather not be poked".
A preposition is a perfectly acceptable thing to end a sentence with. There are times I'd make the sort of edit you suggest here, but I think this phrase is informal enough to leave as is.
I just realized her bra has a banana on it.
Despite not totally being into anthro horses this is still very sweet.
7691733 Got those, thanks! You always seem to find something, don't ya?
Do you realize, The Abyss, that it's come to the point where I don't even read the story synopsis anymore? I just start reading the first chapter? You're so good that I already know I'm going to like it before I've read word one.
Keep being awesome.
7692069 Heh, will do! Another chapter should be coming out in a few days or so, or maybe sometime early next week. And THAT'S where the fun really begins!
Nice butt.
7692234 You talking about the cover art? Or talking about the story itself? Because there are lots of butts. Big, sexy butts temporarily clothed in both cute and sexy panties.
Negative 11 downvotes is 11 downvotes too many.
7692257 It's fine, people have their own reasons for downvoting something.
7692259 From my experience, it's typically pure context. It's funny how many stories you'll see with high dislike/like ratios and then all the comments will be glowingly positive.
7692263 Yeah, well, some people choose not to leave a comment saying why they disliked it because they don't want to get into an argument where nobody wins. Everyone assumes they are right, so when an unstoppable force meets an unmovable wall, nothing really goes anywhere.
7692264 Fair synopsis.
7692264
There's also some people who will downvote certain tags or titles on principal.
I just realized you are going with plantigrade anthropomorphic horses instead of unguligrade. Good choice. More toes to work with.
The guards are right there. Show a little decorum, you nympho.
"'Tis" needs an apostrophe before it.
"Poke her in places in which she'd rather not be poked".
I like this story. I really do. However, Celestia and Luna do not seem very anthropomorphic to me. You do not mention their wings or their tails at all in this chapter. They also do not have the fur coats that most anthros have. In fact, the only thing pony about them are their horns. You even gave them feet instead of hooves. Which, like I said, is great. More toes to work with. However, they seem more human than not. Which is a good thing if you are going for humanized, but you are going for anthro. In following chapters, try to remember to incorporate their wings and tails and their soft, furry coats.
I really do look forward to reading more.
~KBO
I spy a banana!
I look forward to chapter 3
7693065
A preposition is a perfectly acceptable thing to end a sentence with. There are times I'd make the sort of edit you suggest here, but I think this phrase is informal enough to leave as is.
Nice
7704260 Haha thanks.
Update pls, bro.... I want more princest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Extremely