The Abyss
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Despite not totally being into anthro horses this is still very sweet.
Extra space.
"'Tis" needs an apostrophe before it.
The first chapter was pretty cool and the tags under the spoiler leave me giddy for what else is to
cumcome.I look forward to reading more. When I can.
~KBO.
7691733 Got those, thanks! You always seem to find something, don't ya?
Do you realize, The Abyss, that it's come to the point where I don't even read the story synopsis anymore? I just start reading the first chapter? You're so good that I already know I'm going to like it before I've read word one.
Keep being awesome.
7692069 Heh, will do! Another chapter should be coming out in a few days or so, or maybe sometime early next week. And THAT'S where the fun really begins!
Nice butt.
7692234 You talking about the cover art? Or talking about the story itself? Because there are lots of butts. Big, sexy butts temporarily clothed in both cute and sexy panties.
Negative 11 downvotes is 11 downvotes too many.
7692257 It's fine, people have their own reasons for downvoting something.
7692259 From my experience, it's typically pure context. It's funny how many stories you'll see with high dislike/like ratios and then all the comments will be glowingly positive.
7692263 Yeah, well, some people choose not to leave a comment saying why they disliked it because they don't want to get into an argument where nobody wins. Everyone assumes they are right, so when an unstoppable force meets an unmovable wall, nothing really goes anywhere.
7692264 Fair synopsis.
7692264
There's also some people who will downvote certain tags or titles on principal.
7691733 I swear, you turn up in the comments of just about every pony porn outlet imaginable.
I just realized you are going with plantigrade anthropomorphic horses instead of unguligrade. Good choice. More toes to work with.
The guards are right there. Show a little decorum, you nympho.
"'Tis" needs an apostrophe before it.
"Poke her in places in which she'd rather not be poked".
I like this story. I really do. However, Celestia and Luna do not seem very anthropomorphic to me. You do not mention their wings or their tails at all in this chapter. They also do not have the fur coats that most anthros have. In fact, the only thing pony about them are their horns. You even gave them feet instead of hooves. Which, like I said, is great. More toes to work with. However, they seem more human than not. Which is a good thing if you are going for humanized, but you are going for anthro. In following chapters, try to remember to incorporate their wings and tails and their soft, furry coats.
I really do look forward to reading more.
~KBO
7692950 I am everywhere you want to be!
I spy a banana!
I look forward to chapter 3
7693065
A preposition is a perfectly acceptable thing to end a sentence with. There are times I'd make the sort of edit you suggest here, but I think this phrase is informal enough to leave as is.
Damn... I feel dirty now... I LOVE IT!
It's hot and the last line is funny.
Nice
Celestia has a hard time accepting no as an answer.
damn son. that chapter was more arousing than half the clopfics on this site, and there wasn't even sex in it
7704260 Haha thanks.
Update pls, bro.... I want more princest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hot. Hot. Hot!
Are the guards themselves not anthropomorphic? And if they are, why would they not be wearing pants? That seems unprofessional. And if they are not, are their toes unguligrade or plantigrade?
Clear as day, with a ball gag in her mouth, huh?
Once again, clear as day, with a ball gag in her mouth.
So, Celestia and Luna do not control the sun nor the moon in this universe?
This chapter did a better job than the last one in showing that the ladies are anthropomorphic, but just barely. You mentioned tails once, the wings thrice, and the horns five times. But, there was no mention of their soft, furry coats. It still just seems to be skin on skin. And their muzzles are just mouths. And there were no velvety pony ears. And without the fur, the muzzles, and the ears, they are instead more like winged, tailed, and horned humanizations. Which is all really sexy in its own right, but not quite anthropomorphic.
I like this story a lot. But it did not seem to be accurately tagged. It probably would have been more accurate to have a humanization tag than an anthro tag.
You do not write many anthropomorphic stories, do you? I think this is only your second one. The other one was Twilight Masturbates, I believe. I think if you tried more, you will get much better at it. Just write your normal sexy stuff and then just add chest level breasts and hands. Because you are very prolific when it comes to writing about sexy ponies.
~KBO.
You just can't resist the 'chuckle' huh? ~
7997398 Thanks.
enjoyed it, its sexy and it made sense
to me at least
8524097
Extremely