Oooohhhh so much tension

Interesting chapter and choice of using Moondancer. Some problems here and there and other than that, it's ok, just needs to be edited a lot. I really don't think my first reaction to both of my legs being broken would be "Oh Come On!" It would be something like "AAAAAAAAHHHHHH" then I would think about the main situation at hand. Just saying

7455295 Please read again. Spike didn't say "Oh come on!" He simply said "Come on!" in frustration of trying to stand. The full pain didn't come on until after since all Spike could think about was Twilight. I do plan on editing alot, but prefer to write it all up first

7456066 Sorry about that misread but usally Spike would say that and I read it like that
Anyway, I forgot that adrenaline is a thing. So in the heat of the moment, Spike didn't feel pain because the adrenaline kicked in. Maybe mention the adrenaline in this when you go and edit.
When I wrote that post, I just woke up so my brain was still kind of asleep and that is why you got a very bad comment from me

7456262 It's all right, I do plan on editing that scene to make it clearer

Wait, wha?! Baby bomb!

That is exactly how you make a promise Spike that is exactly how you make a promise if it keeps your loved ones safe then that is how you do it...

Also ....

The last line......

The s**t just hit the fan