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TwilightsSecret26
I'm 23 years old, a Pegasister since early 2015, and love writing fanfiction. My favorite character is Twilight Sparkle, and I also volunteer at a No kill animal shelter. I'm a huge MLP FIM fan
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Best of luck's dude.
7440056 Thanks
I. Want. Flash. To. Burn. In. Hell. Where. He. Belongs.
So can you please kill his ass by the end of the story
7440444 He'll get what's coming to him, don't worry. And thanks for reading!
7440452 good becuase that son of a bitch deserves nothing less than all of hells wrath
Oh also no problem it seemed interesting how you took a different approach to the story and had flash be abusive, it's sad to say but it is more true to life, people aren't perfect and different people take that different ways like flash does here with anger and is taking it out on twilight, or so I thought at first but he was actually just using her wasn't he so he could have a higher position in society and not have to work for it or risk getting caught
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Dear Flash Sentry:
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Sincerely: Me.
7440498 Love it xD Don't worry, he'll be suffering a fate he sealed for himself
I think I'm almost ready to join the dark side.
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7440476 I wanted to blend something realistic with MLP, and at first I had mixed feelings, but its actually thanks to this website I have more confidence in it.
Fanfiction . net and Deviantart are quite dead compared to this place, and I'm getting my most feedback for my story here. I'm really glad I joined. I'll be updating most likely tonight :)
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I need more..... Justest will be survived.
'CUPCAKES' 
I AM GOING TO BURN FLASH ALIVE THEN PLACE HIS ASHES IN TARTARUS.
Can't wait to see Flash PAY I think I'm in the mood for a FLASH CUPCAKE
. Love the chapter hope to see more.
Well, that escalated quickly. To be honest, this story has great potential like every other story on fimfiction, but your story needs a lot of editing. I like this idea but you should probably get someone to edit your stuff first before you post it. In the last chapter, Rainbow Dash married Soran and now it's Soarin so you have to change that and also, it feels rush at every corner.
I wish you good luck on this and hope to see it get better.
P.S I find it funny that maybe some of the people who disliked this, were probably some people who hate Flash and yet, this story should be a goldmine to them
7446247 I do plan on editing it all once its finished, xD The Soarin confusion came from the fact I didn't find out until after that's how you spell his name.
But I appreciate the comment :)
Just had a thought what happened to Discord? Doesn't he visit.
7449455 I haven't decided on how I'm gonna fit him in yet
7449579 Just a suggestion but Discord could be invited or just show up for no reason to say hi. In every Discord episode he just appears out of the blue for no reason but to cause chaos. So Discord still has a good reason because he hasn't contacted princess Twilight for a while. Just saying....
7449906 I'll consider it, thanks
Oooohhhh so much tension
Interesting chapter and choice of using Moondancer. Some problems here and there and other than that, it's ok, just needs to be edited a lot. I really don't think my first reaction to both of my legs being broken would be "Oh Come On!" It would be something like "AAAAAAAAHHHHHH" then I would think about the main situation at hand. Just saying
7455295 Please read again. Spike didn't say "Oh come on!" He simply said "Come on!" in frustration of trying to stand. The full pain didn't come on until after since all Spike could think about was Twilight. I do plan on editing alot, but prefer to write it all up first
7456066 Sorry about that misread but usally Spike would say that and I read it like that
Anyway, I forgot that adrenaline is a thing. So in the heat of the moment, Spike didn't feel pain because the adrenaline kicked in. Maybe mention the adrenaline in this when you go and edit.
When I wrote that post, I just woke up so my brain was still kind of asleep and that is why you got a very bad comment from me
7456262 It's all right, I do plan on editing that scene to make it clearer
Glad he is gone and he won't be back any time soon. Hopefully Twilight gets her magic back.
Everything in this chapter was ok just one little thing that would tick me and others off, FLASH BECAME AN F*** ALICORN! (For a few minutes at least)
When you did that, it kind of was hard for me to read it at all. I'm ok with alicorns, it's just if they become one from a stupid amlutet then that really turns me off. Even if that thing is real, then why didn't Sombra use this 'amlutet' when he came back to take over Equestria and why does he even have this much power to turn himself into one.
A more accurate way of doing this would be that this amlutet would increase his agility and magical resistance, and it gets more powerful from stealing some magic from an unicorn/alicorn like Twilight. (As you said it did) That would be better. Please change that when you edit your story because trust me when I say this but, your story is going to get a lot of hate because of that one scene.
Now sorry about that little rant but I just had to say it. Hope you improve upon this a bit better.
7458358 She did
Windows shattering, white glowing eyes xD Thanks for the comment
7458369 I planned to explain it later in the fanfic, but here you go
King Sombra made the amulet, but was defeated before he could use it. He had planned to use it again once he returned, however that was during the Crystal Empire episodes of season 3, where he was stopped.
The amulet had been hidden away all this time, deep under the Crystal Empire.
Enter Flash Sentry: Flash found the amulet, after being lured there by Sombra's spirit. The amulet holds incredible dark power, similar to the Alicorn amulet Trixie had, only it has the power to turn one into an Alicorn.
I plan on explaining more of it later in the fanfic.
This 'stupid' amulet was created by King Sombra, who, if you ask me, is underwhelmed in the show. He's a badass villain who barely gets any screen time, so I'm just trying to make it obvious how evil and powerful he is, since the show really didn't give us enough of that.
And how does he have that much power? Well, he is a badass Unicorn villain from 1000 years ago.
How did Starlight Glimmer alter Star Swirl's time spell in the season 5 finale? I still can't wrap my head around that one. In a way, I'm following the show's formula of having crazy things happening, without explaining too much of it.
7458444 I can understand what you are trying to say but, Sombra's power would be too powerful if he can make himself an Alicorn by pouring all of his magic into a amulet.
My version of the Dark king would be that he is a master of the dark arts but, we do not know who is controlling who. The mind of a King who is wise in plans and manipulation, or the Darkness of which can corrupt others without knowing. Even when he came back, he did not speak a single word to his opponents because the darkness has consumed his soul. The darkness will speak with his voice in the minds of others to become the same as Sombra or to become servants to it. The Darkness is an entity that has no body but has a soul black as ice. Sombra maybe powerful, but I think dark magic has a limit in a pony so the darkness will have to find a more suitable host to be with. Sombra was only defeated by the princess because he fought back against the darkness which made his powers a little bit weaker and when he was imprisoned, the darkness finally toke over his mind and soul. When he return, the darkness tried to find a new host but was interrupted by Twilight and friends.
That's my version of Sombra as he used the darkness to help in his conquest but ultimately failed since the darkness went and started to consume him. Still, the princess used dark magic but only a small amount while Sombra used too much of it. When you use it, you can hear it's voice and if your strong enough to resist it it's temptations, then you're safe.
Also, I think one reason is how Starlight used that spell to go back in time was with the power of the map as we don't know what properties it holds in the world. Maybe she tested it before using it for real.
That's what I believe but I really don't care on what you do with the story. I'm just saying my words and hope to see this come to a good close.
7458770 I understand
I just have a different view of Sombra. I just submitted a new chapter, so maybe it will explain it better. Thanks for continuing to read and comment 
7458770 Um also, forgot to claify. I never stated in the fanfic Sombra put HIS magic in the amulet. He just put the spell of turning one into an Alicorn inside of it.
The amulet also has the ability to drain Unicorns and Alicorns of their magic, but it cannot hold all of Sombra's magic.
hmmmm good story, want more
7460476 Will be updating later today
why do i have feeling, that twilight baby is in fact the King Sombra him self, who going to be feeding on her magic form within.....
good chapter
7461566 That is a dark idea, but that's not what's going on. Another user already wrote something like that on here, so yea. Thanks for commenting
7440498
Also add.
The wrath of Scott Tenorman will **** you up Flash.
Three things I want to talk about. First is Angel, THE DEVIL BUNNY IS DEAD!! YAY!! Sorry for sounding like a jerk towards Angel but, me and a lot of other people really hated him so I'm ok with that.
Second thing is about Applejack. What happened to her from being someone who has fought off the timber wolves to someone being scared of a growl from them. I know you said that she got a flashback of her parents death by the wolves, but in the show, she fought against them without hesitation while saving Spike. She only got afraid when she was stuck because she couldn't fight back.
Went and reread the part and now kinda see why she didn't go and save Angel. My guess is that she thought that she didn't have enough time to save him or she was scared that something like that might happen to here as there could be more than one timber wolf.
Third, we got an stallion who keeps on coming back to Twilight. I smell a ship coming along wouldn't you say
i am unsure if i should be happy that angel is dead or sad.
7468029 Thanks so much for commenting again
I actually had Applejack be scared mainly due to the fact my head canon (and many others) is that her parents were killed by timber wolves. Regarding that one episode...tbh I forgot about it 
So we'll just say now that she's older, the grief is catching up with her.
As far as you sensing a ship, your Pinkie Sense is correct
It's a personal OC of mine, and here's what he looks like:
http://eremikashipper.deviantart.com/art/Firework-Vector-622946196
Also, might want to let you know I edited/improved all the previous chapters (and explained the amulet alot clearer)
Thanks again
7468796 Let's say its happy for the fandom, but sad for the characters. Thanks for commenting
7469024 your most welcome, and I for one and hope for an alicron filly for twilight child.
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7469021 (looks at the picture of OC) Ok, he looks cool a little. (Looks at another picture with him, Twilight and a small filly in the middle) Is that Twilight's daughter in that picture because, it kinda is a little spoiler for the gender and design of her daughter in the story. Just saying
7469279 Well that is why I only sent you a link to Firework, should have warned about the spoilers
It's an alright chapter with some grammar errors but overall, it's ok. Just two things that kinda bothers me, is Twilight teleporting with her unborn child. I would think that maybe the baby would get hurt from that; like say a limb would get removed from the teleport. But that's just me thinking too hard or it could really happen because who knows, cannon wise, it could kill the baby at a state like that
I somewhat believe that Skylay could fly all the way to Canterlot but if he was a bit closer to the city than being in Cloudsdale. (Unless it moved towards the city and being nearby, then it's ok. Just explain a little bit more then I will get it)
7470618 I've noticed in the show, teleporting never seemed to physically hurt Twilight, it happens quick, and it seems easier for her to do than difficult spells.
Like when she gave Rarity wings in "Sonic Rainboom" that actually looked painful for her to do. But when it comes to teleporting, she only expressed dizziness the first time she used it in The Ticket Master, but after that, she seemed to get better and better at it, even using it for no real reason (Applebuck season) I know, I'm obsessed with Twilight
Plus at this point, her magic is much stronger, and better focused, so she's able to be careful. She mainly avoids flying, and using difficult spells during her pregnancy.
As far as Skylar, he is Rainbow's son, so he's FAST. He's the son of two Wonderbolts, so he's gonna show talent at a very young age
Thanks for commenting
Sweet chapter