Pinky littered, like alot now she will get her just desserts. Or that would happen if Twilight didnt have a... unique fix to her situation.
I am not trying to criticize your work because I enjoyed reading this yet you do need to fix this mistake that kept popping up.
in the sentence below the letter ( i ) is supposed to be capitalized not lower case. other than that this was a very wonderful story.
“I'm fine, really Pinky.” Noticing that the concern had melted from her friend’s face she continued. “Now what can i do for you?”
I already know this is going to be a good story because the authors note made me laugh.
What the hay have I just read so far? (also, surprise alicorn dong?!)
>close to her sensitive rejoin-region
7556567 Spotted and fixed thanks.
Would have loved more details on that out of view blowjob, that is all.
...more Than she can......before Then, she...
Need to fix your 'than's into 'then's.
I am not trying to criticize your work because I enjoyed reading this yet you do need to fix this mistake that kept popping up.
in the sentence below the letter ( i ) is supposed to be capitalized not lower case. other than that this was a very wonderful story.
I already know this is going to be a good story because the authors note made me laugh.
What the hay have I just read so far? (also, surprise alicorn dong?!)
>close to her sensitive rejoin
-region
7556567
Spotted and fixed thanks.
Would have loved more details on that out of view blowjob, that is all.
...more Than she can...
...before Then, she...
Need to fix your 'than's into 'then's.