Queen Nightmare Moon and her confidante Anonymous are finally together! It would sure be unfortunate if something like a terrorist attack were to blow them apart, both figuratively and literally.
The way I see it you already wrote the porn story. If other's only want to read smut then they can go back and read the first one. This is something that has a lot more potential and I believe it is worth exploring that potential. Of course, if you wanna throw in some clop every now and again that wouldn't be so bad either.
You know what? I don't say this often but I'd be okay with more story instead of porn, it's interesting and I'd like to see it play out! The long and short of it is, I like this story, this chapter and I hope you continue to write
"are the readers going to get pissed off at me if I try adding a bit more 'story' into this 'porn story'?"
Abso-fuckin-lutely not, you've set up way too interesting of a story here for it to be a BAD thing to continue you that. The clop and the plot can work together, but good lord dude keep it up cause this is super fun to read
8170020 8170153 8170205 8170518 8171139 8171173 8172160 8172400 Thank you all for your kind words of reassurance. I was really unsure if people were only expecting a pure porn story and would be unpleasantly surprised by further, non-porn developments happening within the story, but my doubts have more or less been alleviated. The story shall continue on the course I have planned.
I would love to see this fleshed out into proper story. The basis is one that i hav'nt really seen before and you're off to a good start. Still throw in clop every once in a while, but plot development! That sexy, sexy plot development.pinkie.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw4036-dat_plot.jpg
As far stories go, always remember that it is your story and you should be writing it for yourself. Screw everyone else, a story you write should feel good to you. If people like it then that means you have the right people reading it to begin with and if they don't, well so what, let them eat shit. Just my own opinion.
The story was going good but you fuck it up with this chapter. You just have to make this story one of those you ar right you dont have a big imagenation.
Let me make it simple. Twilight is a terrorist and annon says that she is inocente? What the fuck all terrorist must be kill! If Equestria was like the US she would be fuck right now! Am I right!
8190033 Twilight is not a terrorist. She made an extremely poor attempt to bluff Nightmare Moon, which was seen through immediately. Anon knows that Twilight is a good pony who does not want to hurt anyone, and only did what she did because she desperately wants Celestia back, which is why he let her off the hook. Let's be real here, from what we know of Twilight from the show, do you seriously think she would carry out an actual suicide bombing? Not a god damn chance.
Also, Equestria is not the United States and does not operate as such. While Nightmare Moon's Equestria is now much more authoritarian with her in charge, and deals with crime and terrorism swiftly and severely, Anonymous stepped in personally and used the power of his position to instantly acquit Twilight of any terrorism charges, to which Luna begrudgingly accepted under the condition that Twilight never returns to the palace.
What I know about the show is that twilight cant live wiht out celestia teling her what to do. In other words she is like a dog wiht out its owner. For the récord its not that I hate twilight its more that I hate what it look like what she was trying to do. You know the history about terrorist. Also equestria may not be like the US but ther a places in equestria that would have kill her like dragóns griffin or any other worrior race.
"Y'know, If you ever need a prereader or an editor or whatever, I'd be more than happy to lend a hand. There were these faggots I used to hang out with back in the day, they were pretty autistic, but they had good hearts. Anyway, we'd spend all day bouncing prompts off one another that would inevitably lead to sexual conclusions and-"
8222953 No is not. No lo es idiota you soy de puerto rico. El Ingles no es mi furte así que ten cuidado con como le dices a las personas cuando te refieres a como ellos escriben.
0.o I forgot this was a porn story! I was really just enjoying the story in this chapter, now I'm torn between wanting this to be A porn story or not, I think this will be good either way keep it up!!
“It’s called Celestius Ex,” he happily explains. “It’s about this pony named AJ Henson who’s got all these robotic body parts called ‘augs’, and he finds out that the super secret spy agency he works for is actually being controlled by this group of evil ponies who secretly control Celestia and run Equestria. AJ is really cool ‘cause he’s got all these super awesome robot powers like invisibility and super strength and hacking and stuff, and when ponies ask why he wears sunglasses at night, he says ‘my eyesight is enhanced.’”
Good chapter !
Oh and first
You are back!
One mistake I found:
Should be millenium.
Again.
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Wow, pretty sure I made that mistake more than once. Serves me right for trying to edit this shit at 4 AM.
Edit: it was 3 times. I will now commit honourable subaru
very nice good to have this back
Let's see where this roller coaster of porn and betrayal goes, shall we?
The way I see it you already wrote the porn story. If other's only want to read smut then they can go back and read the first one. This is something that has a lot more potential and I believe it is worth exploring that potential. Of course, if you wanna throw in some clop every now and again that wouldn't be so bad either.
Thanks for the update!
Yay! I like it. Keep going, I like the direction it's headed.
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Agreed! Though I hope for the occassional clop too. I mean a threesome stands in the room. And Twilight wants to befriend Luna, so...
Didn't expect this of all of my favourite stories to get updated again tbh.
But I'm glad it did. Really did enjoy this story.
This story is epic as hell, ride the wave and enjoy it.
this story is awesome! i cant wait for NMMs reaction to twiggly
You know what? I don't say this often but I'd be okay with more story instead of porn, it's interesting and I'd like to see it play out! The long and short of it is, I like this story, this chapter and I hope you continue to write
Love this story having an actual story, not just mindless fucking. looking forward to the next chapter. Keep being awesome!
"are the readers going to get pissed off at me if I try adding a bit more 'story' into this 'porn story'?"
Abso-fuckin-lutely not, you've set up way too interesting of a story here for it to be a BAD thing to continue you that. The clop and the plot can work together, but good lord dude keep it up cause this is super fun to read
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Thank you all for your kind words of reassurance. I was really unsure if people were only expecting a pure porn story and would be unpleasantly surprised by further, non-porn developments happening within the story, but my doubts have more or less been alleviated. The story shall continue on the course I have planned.
Adding more "story" to this "porn story" is the reason I kept waiting for this to update. Do it.
I would love to see this fleshed out into proper story. The basis is one that i hav'nt really seen before and you're off to a good start. Still throw in clop every once in a while, but plot development! That sexy, sexy plot development.pinkie.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw4036-dat_plot.jpg
As far stories go, always remember that it is your story and you should be writing it for yourself. Screw everyone else, a story you write should feel good to you. If people like it then that means you have the right people reading it to begin with and if they don't, well so what, let them eat shit. Just my own opinion.
A porn story that has a actually compelling plot...................you have my approval
Hmm...
The story was going good but you fuck it up with this chapter. You just have to make this story one of those you ar right you dont have a big imagenation.
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Oh. Thank you, this is very informative and tells me a lot.
Let me make it simple. Twilight is a terrorist and annon says that she is inocente? What the fuck all terrorist must be kill! If Equestria was like the US she would be fuck right now! Am I right!
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Twilight is not a terrorist. She made an extremely poor attempt to bluff Nightmare Moon, which was seen through immediately. Anon knows that Twilight is a good pony who does not want to hurt anyone, and only did what she did because she desperately wants Celestia back, which is why he let her off the hook. Let's be real here, from what we know of Twilight from the show, do you seriously think she would carry out an actual suicide bombing? Not a god damn chance.
Also, Equestria is not the United States and does not operate as such. While Nightmare Moon's Equestria is now much more authoritarian with her in charge, and deals with crime and terrorism swiftly and severely, Anonymous stepped in personally and used the power of his position to instantly acquit Twilight of any terrorism charges, to which Luna begrudgingly accepted under the condition that Twilight never returns to the palace.
What I know about the show is that twilight cant live wiht out celestia teling her what to do. In other words she is like a dog wiht out its owner. For the récord its not that I hate twilight its more that I hate what it look like what she was trying to do. You know the history about terrorist. Also equestria may not be like the US but ther a places in equestria that would have kill her like dragóns griffin or any other worrior race.
Truly amazing! I simply cannot wait for the next chapter to see where this journey will fare!
Great job!
Welcome to the party.
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Let's have a moment of silence for grammar. Gone but never forgotten.
Seriously though, what the Hell is up with your comments? Are you trolling or is English not your first language?
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No is not. No lo es idiota you soy de puerto rico. El Ingles no es mi furte así que ten cuidado con como le dices a las personas cuando te refieres a como ellos escriben.
Really good chapter, i definetly wouldnt mind a bit more story in it, follow the skeleton you made for it and bring it to life!
0.o I forgot this was a porn story! I was really just enjoying the story in this chapter, now I'm torn between wanting this to be A porn story or not, I think this will be good either way keep it up!!
Wait wut? I mean, what the hell? I feel like kinda shit now because of that.
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It's a joke that the story is being self-unaware by mocking the readers and authors of fan fiction despite itself being fan fiction.
I.. no, I'm not going to say it.