Well, that was...something.

Fucked up and thoroughly engaging. Well up to your standards.

He was almost half a century old,
Her father’s younger by fifteen years,
despite being twenty years her senior,

So how old is Twilight, exactly?

"He was almost half a century old, and yet he had not let fatherhood wear down the figure he had earned through years of Royal Gaurd service."

"Her father’s younger by fifteen years, Velvet was even more casually dressed."

Twilight couldn’t help but allow a tinge of self-consciousness to fill her as she looked over the mare that had given birth to her; despite being twenty years her senior, Mother had remained improbably beautiful"

So with Night Light at nearly 50 (let's say 49), and Velvet 15 years his junior (34), that bit about being Twi's senior by 20 years would make Twilight 14 approx in this story, correct? Should add foalcon to the tags in that case.

7315112 hmm, you're right. Assuming this wasn't intentional, the author might want to add another 5 to ten years onto Nightlight's age or close the age gap between velvet and him to about 10 years.

idk why it's in this color, anyway can i use this idea in a 'sequal'

“Oh, and why is that?” Velvet said, with a small smirk. “It’s not like I blab about my own relations with Shining on a regular basis. I know how to keep a good thing a secret, dear. It’s not as if it’s the healthiest thing for a family to do, of course, but we’ve made it work quite well I think. I was surprised at first, of course– you always seemed uninterested in sex…”

Arrived for the paperwork. Came for the incest. If I had to describe this fic in one word, it would be schizophrenic. The pacing between the sex and the paperwork jumps up and down like the panties of an indecisive virgin. I'm not sure what the challenge was that you were aiming for with this. But it has sparklecest, so
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