Yes! Yes! Yes! A new chapter!

(Okay, only Twi singing yes I could find in what little time I had lol )

It was a great chapter and I really didn't see anything wrong with it, though I'm not exactly an expert at the english language. Or any language It has a lot of promise though and will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Can't wait to see what you have in store for Sunset and to see the others reactions to it and what is done for it. Hoping to see more soon!

7138196 Thanks for the comment, really made my day to hear such positive feedback.

This story has lots of promise, though I am not ready to give it a like, yet. Also, I liked how you depicted Sunset's 'home.' By her making it, it shows how resourceful she is and the random objects that create help represent her desperation to make a home quickly and effectively. The tarp and rain protection show signs of her readiness for natural occurrences. My favorite part is the location of the home, it shows that Sunset can choose a place to stay that is safe, or at least, as safe a closed alley can be. Wasn't what I was expecting when you said it was dark, but I read the authors notes and you got managed to keep my interest. Good job on the chapter and keep doing this well. I feel like a thumbs up coming soon.

So far, I'm hooked with this story, a few typos, but nothing too major....I just hope it doesn't go into big detailed rape scenes or anything like that...I like dark, but I don't do stories like that, i'm just wondering since you have the sex tag added.

But that being said, so far with how the story is, this is how I reacted when I saw this was updated.

7138340 Thank you for the great comment, I am glad you like it so far and I am fine with the fact that you are not ready to give it a like. I completely understand. (Honestly I did not expect it to have as many as it does or for so many people to have read it.) As for dark, that should really start in the next chapter. Again, thanks for reading and I do hope to hear more of your comments in the future.

7138386 You're welcome. As long as this story remains interesting I will keep commenting.

I can't wait to see what Sunset does when she see's her friends all standing there. I am sure she is going to be both grateful and upset at the same time. grateful that she doesn't have to keep this from them any longer and upset at how they actually found out about this.

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Okay, this was a really good chapter and I can't wait for more

Yes, this is a huge improvement from last chapter! There were still errors, but nothing too serious. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Very nice looking photo but, it would also help to see what her shelter looks like if it where to be placed in the background that is

7140515 I did think about doing that, the only problem was I am still learning how to draw (23 and just now taking up drawing, kinda sad isn't it.) Also the shelter is a little small in my mind so It would be hard to place it. Besides, if I showed what the shelter looked like in the cover art for the story it would ruin the reveal in the second chapter. Or at least that's my thought on it.

Well, now let's see where this goes from here.