Rainbow, after getting to know him better at the Gala and The Rainbow Falls, has quite the crush on Soarin. With the Wonderbolts in Ponyville for a celebration, tonight is going to be her best chance at asking him out. As long as she doesn't blow it.
I am really looking forward to this being continued. You've got a great knack for detail and a storytelling method that flows really well. Also bonus points for Rainbow Dash in first person.
I'm really liking this so far. Gonna give it a fave and a like and eagerly await more.
No I'm not just in it for the porn, though I'd be lying if I said that wasn't a motivator.
PS: I would avoid using asterisks in narrative simply because it's distracting from the piece as a whole. Instead of using them to replicate a knocking sound at the door, simply state that there was a knock at the door. I mean, it is your writing style, and if you like it, then by all means stick to it. It's just a suggestion.
[edit] Holy crap I've been away for a long time. I guess favorites aren't actually a thing anymore. Now there's just bookshelves. I'll add this to whatever the hell that is as soon as I learn how to work it.
I really thought the chapter title was a pun. The knocker is Soarin isn't it.
6993578 I pray that you are not this immature.
6993578 FlutterDash
Good start. Well written, sensual prose. I'll be keeping an eye on this one.
6993564 The 'pun' title will be Chapter 3 - She Blows It. I'm sure you can figure out the 'it' that she 'blows'.
6993578 6993852 Those are strange ways to spell TwiDash
6994344 Thanks!
I am really looking forward to this being continued. You've got a great knack for detail and a storytelling method that flows really well. Also bonus points for Rainbow Dash in first person.
I'm really liking this so far. Gonna give it a fave and a like and eagerly await more.
No I'm not just in it for the porn, though I'd be lying if I said that wasn't a motivator.
PS: I would avoid using asterisks in narrative simply because it's distracting from the piece as a whole. Instead of using them to replicate a knocking sound at the door, simply state that there was a knock at the door. I mean, it is your writing style, and if you like it, then by all means stick to it. It's just a suggestion.
[edit] Holy crap I've been away for a long time. I guess favorites aren't actually a thing anymore. Now there's just bookshelves. I'll add this to whatever the hell that is as soon as I learn how to work it.