The main problem I have with the writing structure is that it just seems to either focus on some other detail, or not focus when it should. I'm kind of surprised Spike didn't walk in on them making out, considering good-smelling cookies. It's also interesting to me that AJ was the one to begin asking Twi on dates, but Twilight (having no experience) was the one to ask to make love. Twice. Got a bit bored while reading this chapter, but it's still worth reading so far.
I see Twilight has been rubbing off on AJ; she's become quite the cunning linguist!
... I'll show myself out.
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The main problem I have with the writing structure is that it just seems to either focus on some other detail, or not focus when it should.
I'm kind of surprised Spike didn't walk in on them making out, considering good-smelling cookies.
It's also interesting to me that AJ was the one to begin asking Twi on dates, but Twilight (having no experience) was the one to ask to make love. Twice.
Got a bit bored while reading this chapter, but it's still worth reading so far.