Dizzy Twister hadn’t been having a good week with her daughter. She couldn’t tell why, but, for whatever reason, Scootaloo kept disobeying everything she told her.
She was beginning to reach her breaking point, but she had the feeling that she'd be able to help her daughter any way possible.
When Dizzy Twister got home, the house was a mess again, dishes were on the floor, laundry wasn’t done and of course Scootaloo’s room was the messiest it had ever been.
“I don’t know what’s gotten into that filly, but this has to stop.I can’t do all the work, I have a job, I’m going to have a talk with her when she gets home.”
She decided to just clean the house, but she wasn’t going to touch Scootaloo's room, she’d at least leave that for her, if the filly decided to clean it.
After cleaning the house a bit, Dizzy looked at the time to see that Scootaloo likely wouldn’t be back home for another couple of hours, so this gave her some good time to drink a little bit of wine.
Now, she wasn’t the type of pony to get drunk or anything, but sometimes, she loved to just sit down and take a sip of alcohol.
Scootaloo was with her friends plus, Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. They had just gotten some tasty Ice Cream and, once the five finished the Ice cream, they went their separate ways.
Sweetie, after waving goodbye to the other fillies, decided to stay and ask Scootaloo some questions. Something had been bothering her and she’d rather give Scootaloo the respect not to ask her in front of the others.
The two sat down on a bench near the Ponyville Park.
“Scootaloo….. why have you been disobeying your mother? Sweetie asked. It was very concerning to the young unicorn. Whenever she went over to visit Scootaloo, she always seemed to hear somepony yelling and it was always Scootaloo who started it because she wouldn't do her chores, but all this negativity wasn’t good to Sweetie.
Scootaloo tried to keep a smile on her face, but she couldn’t, her mother always kept her in a bad mood, which was mostly why Scootaloo tried to get home as late as possible.
“Look, Sweetie, it's none of your business. I just don’t want to talk about it.” with that she waved bye to her friend, and galloped home where she expected to get yelled at or maybe grounded, who knows.
Sweetie stood there alone watching Scootaloo walk away. “I just hope you two figure this out,” she murmured softly, and walked back to her own home.
When Scootaloo got home she dropped her bag in the middle of the floor. She was about to go up to her room, however, she heard her mother call her name before she could even reach the steps.
Scootaloo wasn’t exactly sure what her mother needed, but maybe she was ready to apologize for yelling at her all the time.
Scootaloo walked into the living room to see her mother looking at her with a slight frown.
Maybe she's mad after all… she thought.
“Scootaloo, I’ve told you to start cleaning the house when I’m not home. You need to start doing your chores, what's the matter with you? Oh and don’t get me started with your room, it smells…. it smells like a rat died in there or something! Just clean your room please,” Dizzy finished, asking nicely.
Scootaloo stomped her hoof as hard as she possibly could and yelled, “NO! I’m tired of doing work for you! Why should I have to work my butt off after a hard day of school? That’s right, I shouldn't. Now I’m going to bed. Goodnight, mom…”
Scootaloo ignored anymore calls from her mother and slammed her door shut once she reached it, and she made sure to lock it tight.
Dizzy Twister sighed. This had been going on for a whole month, nothing she said or did seemed to get through to that filly.
Hm, maybe I should see Twilight tomorrow. Maybe she can help me with this problem she thought, walking up to her room, but pausing and glancing at Scootaloo’s locked door. “I just want to help you, baby.” She was more saddened about this, no matter what, she couldn't seem to understand the problem.
Scootaloo started misbehaving right after she got her cutie mark. For some reason, after that, something had been causing her to act like a little brat, more in cline with how her new friend Diamond Tiara used to act.
No matter how many times she tried to help her daughter, it never ended in a polite talk. Instead, it became an argument.
She couldn’t stand it anymore. If Scootaloo kept this up, she'd have no choice but to give up and just accept her daughter's choice, but this was also one reason she needed to see Twilight. She had always taken care of Spike, so she might have some good advice on the matter.
Soon enough the sun came up. The morning was the same as usual: Scootaloo ate her breakfast and left without saying a single word to her mother.
Dizzy Twister had decided last she’d tell her boss she’d be taking the day off from work today, in order to go see Twilight.
Dizzy Twister picked up her saddle bag, left the house and started trotting her way work, where she informed her boss about her day off, before making her way to Twilight’s castle.
When she arrived, Spike politely let her in, took her bag and placed it in a closet by the door.
When Dizzy asked where Twilight was, he told her that the lavender alicorn was in the living room.
Dizzy Twister nodded and thanked Spike.
Entering the living room and finding Twilight, she bowed down to her in a polite manner, it was only courtesy to do such things in front of a princess, although she, like a lot of Ponyville, knew Twilight didn’t like it when ponies did that, but she couldn’t help it.
Once Dizzy Twister took a seat, Spike came in with two cups of hot Tea. They both thanked Spike. After a few sips, Dizzy started telling Twilight everything that's been happening. When she finished, Twilight looked confused.
“I’m sorry you're going through this. I mean it's very odd behavior for Scootaloo and you say this happened a month after she got her cutie mark?” Twilight asked, taking a sip of her tea.
Dizzy Twister nodded and put her cup down “It’s very frustrating Twilight; I’ve used every form of punishment I can think of, but nothing seems to be working. Maybe….maybe I should just, ya know, give up let her do whatever she wants,” she finished, lowering her head.
Twilight spit her tea out. “No, you shouldn't! She needs to learn who's the boss, and that pony is you!” Twilight said firmly.
Dizzy Twister quietly listened, sighing as she remembered something her boss had told her when she’d gone over and asked for the day off.
“Maybe you could do something for me, Twilight?”
She asked, looking to the Princess of Friendship.
Twilight cocked an eyebrow. “Okay. What can I do?”
“Perhaps you could watch her for the week? I just found out I’ve got a meeting to go to and they need me in Cloudsdale for a week. I’m sorry this has come so sudden, but I could use it as a break. Get my head around some things.”
Twilight thought about it. She could use this as a chance to try the punishment she used on Spike when he acted badly. It might be just the thing to get through to Scootaloo in normal methods of child punishments weren’t working on her.
“Okay, I’ll do it. But, I must ask, do you think I could punish Scootaloo in a…. different way?” At the odd look, she added, “It's nothing bad, I promise. But I think it will teach her a lesson.”
Dizzy Twister continued to look at Twilight, confused. “What kind of punishment?” she asked.
Twilight leaned forward and whispered, it into her ear. A blush came over Dizzy’s face.
“That sounds like a... very embarrassing way to punish her. But, I guess if you believe it will work then I’ll allow you to do it,” she said.
Once they finished talking, Dizzy Twister walked home and started packing a few things for her trip. By the time she finished, it was time for Scootaloo to get home.
As if by clockwork, Scootaloo walked in. When she noticed the suitcase, she looked concerned. “Uh, Mom, what's with the suitcase?”
“I’m going to Cloudsdale for a week, so I won’t be here to take care of you,” she began. However, she was rudely interrupted by Scootaloo before she could finish.
“Wait you won’t be here…. for a whole week? YES! I got a whole week by myself” Scootaloo cried, excited, pumping the air.
“Ahem.” The filly looked to her mother. “No, Scootaloo, you're not staying home by yourself; I’m leaving you with Twilight. She's going to take extra good care of you while I’m gone. It'll be fun, I promise,” she added when she noticed the frown forming on her daughter’s face. “Besides, I hear she has some very fun things you two can do.”
Scootaloo didn't like that, but... she'd be living with Princess Twilight for a week, so there would be a lot of trouble she could get into while she stayed there. Plus that castle was so big. She could explore it a little.
“Alright, Mom. I guess I won’t mind staying with her, but can I pack the stuff I want to take with me first?” she asked. Dizzy nodded and Scootaloo left for her room fast.
Dizzy Twister couldn’t help smiling. This was the first conversation they had without a fight in what felt like such a long time. This was a good start.
Within ten minutes, Scootaloo came back with a saddlebag likely full of toys and maybe a few books.
“You all packed Sweetheart?”
Scootaloo nodded. “Yup. I can’t wait to go to Twilight’s I got so much planned,” she said with an evil smirk.
Dizzy Twister giggled. Oh, I think you’ll find this week a lot harder than you think, sweetheart, she thought she walked out the door with Scootaloo following behind her. You’re not the only one with something planned.
As they walked through Ponyville Scootaloo was trying her hardest to keep her excitement in. Once they had arrived, Scootaloo knocked on the door and once again, Spike welcomed them.
After he’d closed the doors, Spike gestured to show Scootaloo her room while Twilight talked with Dizzy Twister.
“So I take it you got everything you need to take care of Scootaloo?” she asked once the two younger ones were out of earshot, concerned if there was anything she’d needed to buy prior.
Twilight smiled. “Oh, don’t you worry. I’ve got everything that's needed. With Cadance expecting a foal of her own, I’ve been preparing for the times I’ll be no doubt foalsitting her, not to mention what I have left over from when I did this with Spike. Trust me, Scootaloo is going to love it. I think all she really needs is to feel young again. As much as she and her friends wanted their Cutie Marks, I think she realizes that part of her life is over now and feels a yearning to return to some semblance of it. I’m 100% positive she’ll love the treatment she's going to get.”
Dizzy Twister sighed. “I’m sorry. I just worry about her sometimes. But, if you truly think this will work, I trust you.
Well, I better get going. Good luck, Twilight….. you'll need it” she muttered that last bit, waving goodbye and left, heading to the train.
Twilight waved and closed the door.
She didn't exactly know if she should do it now or wait till bedtime, but she decided to ask Spike for some help on that.
She found the baby drake in the kitchen, getting some food out.
“Hey, Spike? I was wondering... do you think I should pamper Scootaloo now or wait till tonight?” she asked. She couldn't decide if doing it now would be a right course of action.
Spike paused in what he was doing, thinking carefully about the answer to her question. “If I were you, I’d just let her get used to the place and then, once it's bedtime, you can do whatever you plan. I’m sure she will love it.”
He was halted from continue again due to receiving a hug from Twilight.
“Alright, then. At bedtime, she’ll get her treatment. It's a good thing I pulled out all of your old baby stuff last night”
“You do have rules to give Scootaloo as well….right?” he asked. He couldn't see Scootaloo being treated like a foal without some form of rules being involved.
Twilight smiled. “Don’t worry about it. I’ve got a few rules for her, not too many, but she should understand what will happen if she breaks any of these rules.”
She walked out of the kitchen and headed to the map room. She needed to think about these rules a bit.
When it was six o'clock, Twilight thought it would be the perfect time for young fillies to go to sleep.
She went outside and saw Scootaloo trying her hardest to gain some flight. Rainbow Dash has been telling her to keep doing wing ups and she would eventually get the hang of flight.
“Okay, Scootaloo, it's bedtime,” Twilight called out. She knew Scootaloo would have a fit or something, so when she the frown appeared on the filly’s face, she just levitated the Pegasus onto her back.
“WHAT! Come on, Twilight, it's only six o’cloak. Can’t I stay up longer; Mom always lets me stay up till nine! This isn’t fair!” she pouted.
I get the feeling it’s not so much her letting you as you just making it she has no other choice, Twilight thought wryly.
“Well, sorry, Scootaloo, but those are my rules and, as you’ll be staying under my roof for the week, you’ll be obeying them,” Twilight said, as they went to Scootaloo’s room... or rather, the room she planned her to stay in. “Besides, little foals need their rest.”
Scootaloo looked around the room, her anger cooling as she noted something odd about it; the floors were pink, there was a changing table and to make matters worse, it looked like a foal’s room, as in a baby’s room.
She was very confused as to what was going on. “Uh, this isn’t the room Spike showed me. What going on?”
Twilight levitated Scootaloo onto the changing table and put her on her backside, to which the young filly became even further confused by and a little worried.
“Well, Scootaloo, you’ve caused your mother quite a lot of stress recently, so she came to me for help.” Twilight explained, reaching for a bottle of powder. “And, in answer to her plea, I’ve come up with the best way to help you. Until you learn to act your own age, you will be treated as if you are a foal!” As she spoke, she used the powder, puffing it onto Scootaloo’s no longer Cutie Markless rear, got a white diaper and put it underneath Scootaloo, beforing taping it on.
Once she was diapered, she levitated an Onesie and put that on Scootaloo, too, zipping the back nice and tight.
“Now I have some rules and you must obey them. Don’t obey and your punishment will increase longer. I have all week, after all.
Number one, “No removing the diaper. Only I or Spike can do that. If you have to go or anything, you can use the bathroom for that but do remember that Diaper IS your toilet.”
Twilight thought for a second but this seemed like reasonable rules to her. “Do understand this isn't in anyway trying to make you horribly embarrassed, just a little. Do you accept my rules?”
Scootaloo didn’t respond at first. In truth, she’d been in shock since the moment Twilight started diapering her.
However, now that Twilight hadn’t finished, Scootaloo was snapped out of her daze. She had, however, heard every word Twilight had said and, after thinking about it for several moments, huffed.
“Not much I can really do so…. sure I accept.” Then her eyes widened and she looked pleadingly at the lavender mare. “Just please don’t let Rainbow Dash see me like this! It would destroy my reputation with her!”
Twilight smiled coyly. “As long as you obey rule two, I promise she won’t find out.” With that ,she put Scootaloo into the crib, turned out the lights. As she turned to leave, Twilight murmured, “Goodnight, sweetheart. Tomorrow will be a lot of fun, I promise,” and left.
Every Time Scootaloo rolled over or did anything she'd hear the diaper crinkle, which annoyed her more then anything. It was a little tight due to the Onesie she was wearing, but aside from that, she had to admit she felt okay.
After some time though, she tried taking it off, but the zipper to her clothing was on the back, where she couldn't reach.
“This is so stupid,” she pouted, folding her forehooves. Why did I even agree to this? I’m not a baby!”
But, despite her protests, within three hours she finally fell asleep.
This is cute
Hehe.......
can't wait to see how this goes considering it reminds me of another one just like this
Not a bad start, if one views getting a cutie mark as the Equestrian equivalent of hitting puberty, then Scootaloo's behavior could make some sense. We already saw that Diamond Tiara got pretty cranky for a time after getting her cutie mark, though that was more because of personal issues with her family, and the trouble with her cutie mark was merely the icing on the cake.
Granted, I don't think Scootaloo would be so quick as to stop doing chores and yell at her mother, but I could see her starting to become a bit more rebellious and prone to anger, especially if she still has trouble with her wings.
Good work buddy (except for some misspellings), keep on going!
PS: I hope that story get you on excitement, since this is your first diaper Scootaloo and DIzzy Twister fanfic
More please.
6973926 i see it as a puberty thing a filly had a job as a nurse in one episode so a mark is kinda their way of growing abit.
6976035 True, but even if that's the case I can't see Scootaloo becoming completely lazy and rebellious. At worst, I could see her becoming more easily angered, and quicker to lash out.
I would recommend that you change the cover art. The artist, Kurikia, is rather insistent that his work is not to be used without permission. Haven't read the story as of yet, but I'm mentioning the cover art before I forget.
6976167 Actually I'm going to ask him or her before I do anything.
6976049 Don't worry there is a better reason for Scootaloo's actions, which Scootaloo tells why she acts that way in a future chapter.
6976167 K she/he said I can use it
I really don't feel like doing the tear-down, so I'll give the short and bitter version by saying the formatting is inconsistent, punctuation is lacking, there's an almost complete lack of style, the plot is Sanic-speed rushed, it's chock-full of stilted dialogue and descriptions, and there's just a general lack of polish and finesse.
Grammar is acceptable, though.
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6977317 If you dont mind me asking but what's stilted dialogue even mean? I've never heard that word used not once.
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It means unnatural or awkward. Uncanny valley is, in a sense, the companion word for physical appearance, if you're familiar with that term.
6977815 How odd I've heard from many peoplo you can be quite rude/be a dick with you're reviews, but you dont really seem to act the way I've heard, maybe those peoplo just can't handle opinions?
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It can depend a lot on how inspired I'm feeling at the time and whether I feel like putting in the time investment to be truly creative with my critique. In that case I wasn't really feeling it, jaded from so many mediocre stories that I couldn't summon the will to give it my all.
That said, I do try to keep the insults regulated to the story and not to the author, unless it's painfully obvious the author utterly failed to perform any sort of precursory check for legibility. Most writers can't separate their ego from their work though, and so they take it personally. Simply put, most people don't like being held to such standards as "Basic grasp of the English language" and "Capability of a third-grader".
But I digress, your lack of utter disbelief that I would dare to criticize your story is a good mark in my books. While your writing nay be in dire need of improvement, your willingness to listen to blunt comments about the story's shortcomings is promising. It means you understand there's room to improve and possess a desire to do so.
I wish you the best in your writing endeavors, and hope you put self-improvement at the higher end of your priorities. Remember, a good writer is a better reader; might I recommend the late Terry Pratchett's work to learn from?
Oh, and please forgive any minor typos, I'm writing this from my phone and the autocorrect can be a little aggressive at times.
Another Matt 11 story ,another diaper sadistic punishment story, another dislike from me
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What's so sadistic about it and do you have some form of huge hatred towards me?
6980334 you gotta admit alot of your stories involve punishment involving treating whomever is being punished like a foal/baby and yes I would consider that not only sadistic but also abuse
6980402 If you don't like it then just dont read it, its that easy, and its fanfiction, not like its real.
6980421 I am well aware this is not real thank God it isn't also the comment section goes two ways positive comments and negative comments I was using my right to comment the latter if you don't like negative feedback you should not write stories
6980437 I dont mind negative feedback but the way you were saying it made you sound like a dick. if you could be more polite I wouldn't mind, downright saying you're going to dislike it as a comment is rather rude.
6980450 well I wasn't trying to be a dick but I hate to tell you the world is full of them so once more if you cannot handle assholes on the internet you probably should not write fanfiction
6980437 Bro just chill if it bothers you so Much just stop responding or if you have ssuch a huge problem stop reading that's about all I can say
6976035 and as for you Matt Just don't let it bother you dude people love your stories keep writing
6981946 I apologize for last night I went overboard and said things I shouldn't have
6982100 thank you now lets all get along
6982100 I am sorry as well, I might of been in a bad mood at the time, I should of just not bother replying to you're first comment.
6983502 I hate to be that guy buuuuut... You're-> Your
Edit: I figured out how to quote ponies.
6983889 Your and You're always confuses me, I never learned how and when to use them correctly, Blame my schools for never teaching me that.
6983945
Oh, well. Buck the schools then!
Okay, having now read the chapter, and having already made my presence known, I figure I'll perform some criticism. Here we go.
Dizzy Twister's worry about Scootaloo seems to be quite accurate as to the worries of a mother, although not being a mother myself I cannot say this with certainty. Scootaloo's reasoning, though upsetting to her mother, is sympathetic, appearing more to be mental and emotional exhaustion than actual misbehavior. This is, of course, not necessarily a problem with the story, and the punishment may in fact be an opportunity for her to recover. Then we run into some problems. Twilight's character is obscured by the demands of the story's premise, though I expect that to resolve shortly, but Spike seems out of character. Rather, Spike is not so much out of character than that he appears as an accessory, with his lines being spoken with none of his "voice", so to speak.
While for syntax I largely operate under the principle of You Know What I Meant, a few errors are of particular notice. There are seemingly random capitalizations of words that are distinctly not proper nouns. While certain styles do capitalize words, this is done in such a fashion that the words are treated as proper nouns. Referring to an angry commentator as A Stranger On The Internet, for example, is a sarcastic remark where the phrase is used as a personal name or title. Likewise, certain important words, such as capitalizing Justice or Kindness, is to say that it refers properly to the abstract concept or metaphysical entity rather than the trait if a specific person or event.
All said, your work is definitely improving.
first think in came in my head why Scootaloo act like was teenage rebellion age but then i read this line.
who the hell have been hang with to that to her? maybe Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon it rubbing off her?
key words you will
6973926 Are your panties in a twist in the slightest that this is your concept of a story? I'm referring to Act a foal, become the foal. I am aware Mat11 made the headcannon of Scootaloo being Dizzie Twisters daughter, but the similarities are unmistakable.
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When will you update?!
7132091 Soonish, I have had a busy month, but next chapter so far has 500 words so expect it soonish.
If Scootaloo's behavior really was starting to become too bratty than why did she just go along? If she was starting to get out of control she would contest Twilight over something like that. If you are taking on a bratty child you need to have both dominance and patience. Scootaloo should test those in Twilight; her patience and her dedication.
It went from 0-60 to quickly, I would have expected some resistance from Scootaloo.
hopefully this will settle scootaloo from being rebellious