Another night, another party. Fleur De Lis has grown horribly bored of it. Sleep holds little appeal, as does gossip. But somepony new has arrived. Dark, alluring, and interesting. Perhaps the night need not be so dull after all.
Would they call their chest a "bosom" since their breasts are between their hind legs? It's little saying like this, both in the narrative and in dialogue, that kinda knock me out of pony stories. Just a thought.
Luna let out a little gasp, whispering: “Is that the elephant he kept referring to?”
This sent me into a coughing fit of laughter. I'm still not sure if she's playing it up or just doesn't get the metaphor.
one half full bottle of brandy shattered
Waste of good brandy. It was sacrificed for a good cause though.
Ahh, wonderful chapter. I do love the characterization at play for, for all of them but for Fancy Pants most of all. He's like, the Gentleman Distilled, unflappable and totally in control of whatever situation he's in. Truly, he is the Most Interesting Stallion In The World.
Shower sex is one of the better kinds of sex. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
7630763 This was a bit of a research fail on my part. The first result I found in my search confirmed my assumption so I didn't continue looking. All later results have something along the lines of "a human's chest" as the first definition and "a woman's breasts" as the second. That's a rather embarrassing slip-up, and there is no excuse for poor research practices, you have my apologies.
7631537 No worries! Honestly, I debated on that myself, but I so rarely will have a legitimate reason to describe a pony struggling to catch her breath while running from a horny princess. I figured what the hell.
7631541 It is important to take common vernacular use and reader assumptions into consideration while writing. It doesn't matter as much in the narrative, but for dialogue and character thought it's more important than most people think. I've lost count of the numbers times I've seen "hand" and "foot" used in dialogue as parts of a phrase ("lend a hand" or example) and it just knocks me out of the story for a moment.
It's a hard line to walk at times, I normally try to go with using simpler words but word choice and word play are too fun sometimes.
Indeed I see it has been! And so magnificently done as well! Sorry for the late reply, I actually didn't get the notification for your comment, I didn't see it until I was scrolling through.
I'm still absolutely adoring your take on Fancy Pants, and this chapter was delightfully saucy without going overboard. My S.O was asking me why I was blushing so heavily while I was reading. Several of Luna's lines had me giggling out loud as well. Well done on all counts. Shame about the brandy, though.
steamy !
7627026 Yes, I imagine a hot shower would be.
The chapter was very sexy, as well. Worth the wait, as always!
I would very much like to upvote this for a second time, but I will settle for complimenting it as quite well written.
7628642 Glad you enjoyed it. It was a lot of fun to write.
7548296 Your wish is granted.
7561755 Well, here you go.
7571347 Sorry for the wait.
Fancy is wonderful in this story.
Would they call their chest a "bosom" since their breasts are between their hind legs?
It's little saying like this, both in the narrative and in dialogue, that kinda knock me out of pony stories. Just a thought.
This sent me into a coughing fit of laughter.
I'm still not sure if she's playing it up or just doesn't get the metaphor.
Waste of good brandy.
It was sacrificed for a good cause though.
Ahh, wonderful chapter. I do love the characterization at play for, for all of them but for Fancy Pants most of all. He's like, the Gentleman Distilled, unflappable and totally in control of whatever situation he's in. Truly, he is the Most Interesting Stallion In The World.
Shower sex is one of the better kinds of sex. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
7630726 Bosom literally just means chest. We associate it with breasts for obvious reasons. Even men can have a bosom.
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This was a bit of a research fail on my part. The first result I found in my search confirmed my assumption so I didn't continue looking. All later results have something along the lines of "a human's chest" as the first definition and "a woman's breasts" as the second.
That's a rather embarrassing slip-up, and there is no excuse for poor research practices, you have my apologies.
7631537 No worries! Honestly, I debated on that myself, but I so rarely will have a legitimate reason to describe a pony struggling to catch her breath while running from a horny princess. I figured what the hell.
7631541
It is important to take common vernacular use and reader assumptions into consideration while writing. It doesn't matter as much in the narrative, but for dialogue and character thought it's more important than most people think.
I've lost count of the numbers times I've seen "hand" and "foot" used in dialogue as parts of a phrase ("lend a hand" or example) and it just knocks me out of the story for a moment.
It's a hard line to walk at times, I normally try to go with using simpler words but word choice and word play are too fun sometimes.
7631585 Exactly! Especially from a character with a unique vernacular. I adore writing from Fleur's pov.
Sexy mares.
A gentleman does not cum too soon, nor too late, but precisely when he needs to.
He musn't tarry nor hurry; every moment and movement precise.
A gentleman maintains eye contact when it is polite to do so and divides his attention when it is wanted elsewhere.
In all things, he must be stimulating.
And the guest always finishes first.
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Indeed I see it has been! And so magnificently done as well! Sorry for the late reply, I actually didn't get the notification for your comment, I didn't see it until I was scrolling through.
I'm still absolutely adoring your take on Fancy Pants, and this chapter was delightfully saucy without going overboard. My S.O was asking me why I was blushing so heavily while I was reading. Several of Luna's lines had me giggling out loud as well. Well done on all counts. Shame about the brandy, though.
Damn. That threat of being loud might have been a turn off for me. Felur's early hesitation was also very cute.
7683416 Heh. It's a real concern though. Luna's got some lungs.