An archaeological discovery brings Twilight and her friends to a cave full of items and materials never before seen in Equestria. Despite their precautions, Twilight is abruptly brought to the Capital Wasteland. Her friends' whereabouts are unknown.
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6747390 Whether or not you believe me, I'm not the sort of person that'd betray someone's trust like that. There's very little incentive for me to do something like that. What have I got to gain from wantonly passing around gdoc links? So I don't understand. If you have a look on my main profile, you can find a list of stories I've helped with, and you can even ask those people whether or not I've done just that. I 100% guarantee you they'd say I haven't.
And why did you delete my comment? Deleting comments does not look good on your behalf. I'm just trying to help here, dude.
6748033 Sorry, I didn't mean anything by deleting those old comments. You commented on some edits I needed to make, I made due corrections, then I deleted the old long list-like comments so people reading the comment section wouldn't see any spoilers. My apology if I offended you.
And I was tired last time I commented you (I stayed up almost all night checking on how my new story was doing) so my reaction was a bit irrational. However, I have reconsidered your offer and would like to make amends by apologizing, and accepting you as an editor. I'll PM the link to chapter two, if you are still up for that editing offer that is. I wouldn't be the least bit offended if you declined, after my previous actions.
6748124 Even so, you shouldn't really delete comments, period. It looks bad in that anyone that sees deleted comments will immediately assume that the writer was being a poor sport about something and you might get called out on it. You'd be better off just not deleting comments, and if someone is being a cunt to you in the comments of a story just block them then they can't comment on your page, stories etc.
Anyway, I'm gonna pass on editing now. To put it politely, I'm gonna be busy at work over the holidays and I'll be going away, so it'll leave me little time to edit.
6748218 Fair enough. Have a happy holiday season.
You seem to have a decent start going. You go into enough detail to paint a picture without going so overboard that I just skip it to get to the dialogue. The pacing works thus far, and I can buy the anthro due to a fractured mirror. Why a fix-it spell does the exact opposite... well we'll see where you go with that.
Characterization is good so far. Flutters actually remembering her self-confidence lessons is a plus. While people can only survive a week without water, they can potentially last a month without food, so I don't think Twilight would quite be skeletal at that point. Maybe 2 weeks in.
Taking the anthro route in the capital wastes is a different approach , that I've seen, so as long as your writing remains as good if not better than it is now, I'll certainly be watching this story unfold. Let's all hope this story doesn't get left behind/abandoned after a few chapters.
heh, Daniel Neeson. I see what you did there.....
I was lucky by the time I got to Minefield. I'd found the sniper rifle hidden in the rock behind Megaton, and when he started popping off shots at me, I circled around behind his building onto the ridge overlooking his perch and took him out from behind.
you fucking didn't
7354848 did what
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Reference to Fallout New Vegas
okies, you have my Woot!!
I hated minefield. Because of that damn sniper. I’d rather run through super duper mart a few times. First time I did minefield I just shot and killed the sniper. After I realized I could sell him to slavers I ended up doing that.
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out of all the time i played fallout 3 i went to minefield once, died from the sniper and never returned honestly the dc ruins were safer.