Not a bad start at all. I'm curious to see where this goes.

I'm very interested in knowing where the story goes. Can't wait for the next chapter.

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I'm looking forward to see more of this story

The variety of new fetishes i learn about through this community is a neverending source of amusement for me.

A dirty diaper is not really my kinda kink, but damn if I'm not curious where this is going.

And to be honest the image of Twilight acting like a baby is cute as hell.

Make her chew on her own mane, thats one of my favorite Foal!Twilight pictures. Pretty please?

I'm liking where this is going...

not bad but rushed. Make Twilight do some foal games before she messes her diaper. The messing should be the very last thing Twilight does, maybe it would be a good idea to not have her do it at all before Chrysalis shows up. You can make a reference that she prepared herself to, and is actually planning not to mess. That she isn't willing to go that far but Chrysalis makes her.

More please. I'm enjoying it so far.

6798125 I don't see how Twilight messing herself now makes this story rushed. Are you of the mindset that using a diaper should be the absolute last thing anypony does in a diaperfic or something?

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Glad you guys want to see where this goes. Hopefully I can have chapter two up by next week.

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yes, it should be the climax. You can only do it once a day in a story.

6798759 I have read a lot of diaperfics that have that as the climax, but that's not really the direction that I wanted to take with this story. My goal is to do something a little different than the norm. As for the once a day rule, I don't know where you got that from.

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Still it's too quick and it would help for things to happen in between Twilight diapering herself and messing it.
I heard it that a professional diaper story writer uses it as a rule of thumb.
Though maybe because of the diet of ponies that rule doesn't aptly to them. Nevertheless many diaper writers have them mess over and over and you should try to avoid that.

6799161 You don't have to worry, this isn't going to devolve into Twilight messing herself multiple times a chapter or anything. The reason she used her diaper in the first chapter was just because it aroused her.

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I still think you should try to expand the first chapter a little and add some foal games that she tries but aren't fun because she's alone. That will show her desire to have a caretaker.

I thought the pacing was fine. It established her fetish and about how far she'd take it as set up for her character for the main part of the story in Chrysalis's grasp one way or another (at least I assume that's where this is going).

Very interested to see what Chrysalis plans to do with her. Maybe she will wake up with a headache, in a nursery with "Celestia" caring for her...

6805316 Well, no spoilers or anything, but you may be on the right track there.

I know who walked in but I realy want to say this: "It's Nightmare Moon!"
Just an idea.

queen chrysalis...