Well ... This certainly puts a perspective on things. The fake Twilight might get away with it for while, as long as it can learn to put up a better act.
Twilight smiled. "Good, I have prepared us a normal pony breakfast, as ponies often do."
For one, it shouldn't refer to pony customs like that, because that's a dead give-away. Also, it can't hide behind the 'tired from reading so much' excuse forever. But all together: a reasonable start.
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Twilight was sitting up in her crib, eyes still bleary from sleep, staring at Princess Cadance.
Scratch that, a copy of Princess Cadance.
The look on her face must have been a cross of shock, disgust, and arous--... some other third thing
This is interesting.
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Awwwww! It's kind of cute seeing Twilight babied like that ... apart from the carer being Chrysalis, she's been kidnapped and imprisoned in the changeling hive, and she's partially forced to act like a foal. Uh oh, you can't hide some stuff from Chrysalis, Twilight. She's a being that feeds on emotions, remember?
Twilight could hardly protest, what with the empty feeling in her belly. But this did not mean she was submitting to Chrysalis' whims.
Not even close.
Seriously, who is she trying to convince? The readers, or herself?
As I expected, Twilight's replacement is completely inept. Thankfully for Chrysalis (and for us), Spike remains hilariously oblivious. I hope the rest of Twilight's friends will be similarly oblivious, at least until we can see Chrysalis getting a steady supply of love out of Twilight.
Well ... This certainly puts a perspective on things. The fake Twilight might get away with it for while, as long as it can learn to put up a better act.
For one, it shouldn't refer to pony customs like that, because that's a dead give-away. Also, it can't hide behind the 'tired from reading so much' excuse forever. But all together: a reasonable start.
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This is interesting.
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Awwwww! It's kind of cute seeing Twilight babied like that ... apart from the carer being Chrysalis, she's been kidnapped and imprisoned in the changeling hive, and she's partially forced to act like a foal. Uh oh, you can't hide some stuff from Chrysalis, Twilight. She's a being that feeds on emotions, remember?
Seriously, who is she trying to convince? The readers, or herself?
Hmm, I do hope this has a sweet ending. Chrysalis is starting to make me think she could be warming up to Twilight.
I would think Twilight would be more rebellious. That she is willing to endure a rash for hours just to not let Chrysalis win.
As I expected, Twilight's replacement is completely inept. Thankfully for Chrysalis (and for us), Spike remains hilariously oblivious. I hope the rest of Twilight's friends will be similarly oblivious, at least until we can see Chrysalis getting a steady supply of love out of Twilight.
hmmm