Twilight Sparkle
-Chapter 2: Weapon Acquisition-
Twilight kept walking until she arrived at a cottage. Though it wasn't Fluttershy's cottage. She cautiously approached it and peered in the window. No pony in sight. She circled around to the side and stood in front of the door. She raised her hoof but then time slowed again.
"Aw, crap." she said in annoyance.
"Looks like you're trying to open a door."
"Really?" asked Twilight sarcastically. "I had no idea."
"When approaching doors, an icon will appear. Press the action button to perform the depicted action.
Twilight saw an icon appear in front of the door.
"And the action button is?"
[Gameplay Tip] Press X to Perform Actions
"Of course." said Twilight smugly. "The X button."
Time resumed and Twilight knocked. When there was no answer, she opened the door and entered. The place was a mess. Looked as though a little bomb went off.
"Anypony here?" she asked, half hoping someone would answer and half hoping someone would not.
"No one did. She entered further and walked around. It was dark. She then saw something sparkling on the floor.
"Very good. You found a sparkle! That usually means an item you can pick-up."
"Why?"
"No one knows! That's just how games work."
"I see." said Twilight, going to the object and picked it up.
[Item Acquired] Pistol
"A pistol?" asked Twilight. "Wait... doesn't that mean..."
"Congratualtions!"
"Yep." said Twilight, narrowing her eyes. "There it is."
"You've acquired the pistol! Now you can shoot things!"
"Is that so"
[Objective] Shoot Something
"Shoot something?" asked Twilight. "Alright." Time slowed again. "OH, COME ON!"
"To aim, you must press and hold the L2 Button!"
[Gameplay Tip] Press And Hold the L2 Button to Aim
"L2? What is with all these BUTTONS?!" yelled Twilight, raising the pistol and aiming. "Happy?!"
"Very. And well done. Now to fire... press the--"
"Let me guess." interrupted Twilight. "R2 Button?"
"Let me finish. Well done. Now to fire--"
"Press the R2 Button?"
"I SAID LET ME FINISH! Well done. Now to fire... press the..."
"R2 Button." whispered Twilight.
"R2 Button."
Twilight rolled her eyes and sighed in annoyance.
[Gameplay Tip] Press R2 to Fire
"Thank you, completely useless text. So helpful."
She aimed and fire, shooting out a window.
"Very good. Now you're ready for your first mission."
Twilight gulped. "Celestia, help me."
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Cool so far
wow.....another story
This is a pretty neat idea, but try to expand on your writing a little more. Having individual lines of dialogue is okay, but don't do it too much or you'll confuse/bore the reader whose constantly trying to distinguish who is who. Try to ease up on the caps lock as well and use dialogue tags instead.
Added to favorites to track.
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Agreed, but i would read even if there is a ton of spelling errors and it is hard to understand who says what
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I can start on Luna now. As for Pinkamena I can see why you would think that. Let me explain and, afterwards, tell me whether or not you want her moved:
Pinkamena appeared in "A Party Of One" and was portrayed as sad, depressed, and a little crazy. Sgt. Sprinkles comes along and turns her into a happy, playful, psychotic serial killer. I come along and add upon her character and, apparently, makes her more interesting. So her personality is an OC and the way she'll be portrayed in this story... it'll by MY version.
Now I leave it up to you. Choose one of the three categories to put her in:
-My OC's- (stays)
-Others' OC's-
-Side Characters-
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1) Caps lock are used to shoe extreme yelling.
2) Italics are used to show the game narrator.
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Well... Actually... Did you know that Cupcakes was in fact written BEFORE "Party of One"? Surprising, isn't it?
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Still... she's still sort of an OC. Now there's 3 Pinkamena versions in the story.
Pinkamena Diane Pie {Show Ver.}
Pinkamena Diane Pie {"Pinkamena" Ver.}
Pinkamena Diane Pie {"Cupcakes" Ver.}
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I have all these ideas in my mind and I must write them down immediately before my head explodes.