She liked to think she was bringing a savage to dignity.
Really? You're going with the old, "Men are stupid / savages" trope, that women or mares have to try to change men to suit them? If I had a wife - and she thought that about me, privately or not - I would simply walk out the door.
I think you’re overreacting. No, he’s not. Look at the context of the previous paragraph:
The florist had worked hard to master basic cooking after living a life of dependence on her boss and friend, Daisy, to keep herself fed. Now living with a human stallion whose idea of dinner involved cardboard boxes, all manner of modern processing, preservatives, and the absolute horror of fast-food restaurants — the poor mare had fainted when Lyra described the concept of them to her — Roseluck knew she’d be called upon to help feed her stallion in the far-less industrialized land of Equestria.
She liked to think she was bringing a savage to dignity. A handsome savage with great abs, nice flanks, sweet disposition, and great bedroom technique, but a savage nonetheless.
Calling him ‘savage’ here is in (exaggerated) reference to his previously poor eating habits, what she sees as his over-reliance on fast food/TV dinners than eating good home-cooked meals, which she seeks to rectify by becoming a good cook so she can take care of her stallion as a proper mare (remember reversed gender roles; mares are programmed to keep and protect stallions in Equestria!) Having read all the stories of these two including The Scent of Prey and A Gentleman’s Price, Richard is anything but stupid or uncivilized and she would never think that about him. She calls him ‘monster’ once in a while, but that’s only in teasing reference to their predator/prey games back when he was a Gentleman and she was his client.
Thumbs way up on the chapter, AJA!!!! Was a pleasure to read and edit. And one can only imagine what Terra--or Rose--are going to do next...
8253324 I'm just now noticing this comment, forgive the late response. Regarding tannerite, we know a limited supply of firearms were brought into Equestria by the U.S. Marine Corps in Feathered Heart so it isn't inconceivable that tannerite could exist here. I'm using headcanon here since FH was never finished (Demon Eyes Laharl left the fandom for greener pastures) but perhaps after the Cloven War a limited amount was brought in to test out firearms use for the Equestrian military. You never know! I could explain things better if I knew how familiar you were with this universe, but I recommend Gentleman For Mares and Feathered Heart to get some background on what you're reading here. Thanks for the comment.
8538868 Honestly, this chapter wasn't my cup of tea either. Not to say I didn't like the scene I wrote, but it just isn't my dig. I was ultimately writing for the challenge of writing a human woman on stallion scene which are rare. It's no Foolers Rush In Chapter Four, but it was good for when I wrote it.
Speaking of Chapter Four, I can't see the downside to simply cranking out a few one-shots on that level for the purpose of getting my name out there so that maybe they'll give one of my longer fics a chance. I have a couple ideas too.
I agree that we should be hearing more about Terra given her prominence, and rest assured you will.
Really? You're going with the old, "Men are stupid / savages" trope, that women or mares have to try to change men to suit them? If I had a wife - and she thought that about me, privately or not - I would simply walk out the door.
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I think you’re overreacting. No, he’s not. Look at the context of the previous paragraph:
Calling him ‘savage’ here is in (exaggerated) reference to his previously poor eating habits, what she sees as his over-reliance on fast food/TV dinners than eating good home-cooked meals, which she seeks to rectify by becoming a good cook so she can take care of her stallion as a proper mare (remember reversed gender roles; mares are programmed to keep and protect stallions in Equestria!) Having read all the stories of these two including The Scent of Prey and A Gentleman’s Price, Richard is anything but stupid or uncivilized and she would never think that about him. She calls him ‘monster’ once in a while, but that’s only in teasing reference to their predator/prey games back when he was a Gentleman and she was his client.
Thumbs way up on the chapter, AJA!!!! Was a pleasure to read and edit. And one can only imagine what Terra--or Rose--are going to do next...
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Running theme of hunter and prey going all the way back to the parent fic. Wasn't intended to be anything other than a callback.
Great work as always, now to badger you to do MORE
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I'm just now noticing this comment, forgive the late response. Regarding tannerite, we know a limited supply of firearms were brought into Equestria by the U.S. Marine Corps in Feathered Heart so it isn't inconceivable that tannerite could exist here. I'm using headcanon here since FH was never finished (Demon Eyes Laharl left the fandom for greener pastures) but perhaps after the Cloven War a limited amount was brought in to test out firearms use for the Equestrian military. You never know! I could explain things better if I knew how familiar you were with this universe, but I recommend Gentleman For Mares and Feathered Heart to get some background on what you're reading here. Thanks for the comment.
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Honestly, this chapter wasn't my cup of tea either. Not to say I didn't like the scene I wrote, but it just isn't my dig. I was ultimately writing for the challenge of writing a human woman on stallion scene which are rare. It's no Foolers Rush In Chapter Four, but it was good for when I wrote it.
Speaking of Chapter Four, I can't see the downside to simply cranking out a few one-shots on that level for the purpose of getting my name out there so that maybe they'll give one of my longer fics a chance. I have a couple ideas too.
I agree that we should be hearing more about Terra given her prominence, and rest assured you will.