I don't get why this is being downvoted so miserably. It's a fine enough story, the first person narrative you've got isn't trite or cliche, and there are definitely bits of inner-monologuing I could see that giant sexy idiot Mac thinking. Mac comes off as unique in this, so does Caramel, it's a nice change from all he 'Caramel is shy and reserved, and Mac is a lovesick dope' stuff at least. There's a few spelling errors, but other than that it's not anywhere close to bad, I'd say.
Thank you! Did you know that this morning I woke up all like, "oh, screw this fanfic stuff. I'm going to go write some original fiction." So, good timing. ;) Imma go write some horse stories, now.
6585584 It's being downvoted because most people who come to FIMFiction are basic and unimaginative, looking for straight second-person self-insert HiE stories, to live out their fantasies. Even the slightest bit of homoerotica sets that particular crowd off into a frenzy of fury.
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^.^ Thank you! I do my best.
I don't get why this is being downvoted so miserably. It's a fine enough story, the first person narrative you've got isn't trite or cliche, and there are definitely bits of inner-monologuing I could see that giant sexy idiot Mac thinking. Mac comes off as unique in this, so does Caramel, it's a nice change from all he 'Caramel is shy and reserved, and Mac is a lovesick dope' stuff at least. There's a few spelling errors, but other than that it's not anywhere close to bad, I'd say.
Keep up the good work, champ :-)
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Thank you! Did you know that this morning I woke up all like, "oh, screw this fanfic stuff. I'm going to go write some original fiction." So, good timing. ;) Imma go write some horse stories, now.
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I mean, writing anything, horse or non-horse related is usually a better way to spend time than jackin' around, right?
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More fun than video games.
6585584 It's being downvoted because most people who come to FIMFiction are basic and unimaginative, looking for straight second-person self-insert HiE stories, to live out their fantasies. Even the slightest bit of homoerotica sets that particular crowd off into a frenzy of fury.
This is good clop. Seriously.
6611390 im chuckling because your comment has two downvotes. it seems that crowd doesn't like being called out.
The first person view is rather charming~
Rainbow is gonna try to stick it in his butt with a strap on isn't she?