"This is the story of how I met and fell in love with the most stunning filly in the world" -Anon
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Meh...not really a bad start but...I don't think anyone could pull a 180 on DT like that no matter how surprised they were by a sudden request. And bitch or no, she should have had some kind of reaction to the cursing. Outside of that the whole I was found by fluttershy and the only ones I know are the mane 6 thing is really overdone. Might I recommend he be companions with somepony different and under used? Maybe Roseluck or even Zecora? This all of course is up to you. Sorry if this comment upsets you in anyway, all I wish to attempt to do is help your story stand out. I did like the intro paragraph but the rest seamed a bit...dull and the cursing was in my opinion a little too much. (Not sure anyone could live with Shy for that long and still cuss that much. Much less to a filly) also you can flesh out your chapters by adding more detail to certain events like fluttershy's dress. I'm trying to be helpful but this review seems more a-holeish...sorry about that.
you have my attention.
not a bad start so far
So far pretty good, a few mistakes here and there but nothing too bad.
Looking forward to more chapters :)
Ok then
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Until next time ZERONI AWAAAAAAAY
(P.s. keep this up... That's comein from a guy how has never written a story... Yeaaaah I'm gonna go now ok... K)
MORE!!!!!! I NEED MORE!!!!!!!!
Your doing good, take your time to make the story you want ok.
WOW! I was not even off for 12 hours and see so much positivity!
I will continue. And if anyone wants to make any suggestions on another story i can make, dont be afraid to message me! I dont bite :)
6500063 no not at all :) it doesnt upset me! And i was thinking of addind zecore later with along with discord but i forgot to tag =3
What's the age group of these characters anyway? How old's Anon? What about Silver Spoon?
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If you gotta ask, then the answer's probably not appropriate for polite society, if you snort my snuff.