OK: Nadiya and I are doing major editing on the story and plot. We came up with a BRILLIANT idea that will cause a lot of the past chapters to be edited to fir the new plot. I suggest that when we are done editing and re-publish all the chapters, you reread then so you don't get confused. Thanks! Trust me, when we're done editing and stuff, it's going to be SO AWESOME
this......this is terrifying and horrifying, yet it is also one of the greatest stories i have ever read, and i have just begun. You have a true talent here, my of my friends write, one has a book published, and i read to the point that i am up for days at a time with various books. THIS KICKS ASS.
I am disapoint
But this is good
We must continue
OK:
Nadiya and I are doing major editing on the story and plot.
We came up with a BRILLIANT idea that will cause a lot of the past chapters to be edited to fir the new plot.
I suggest that when we are done editing and re-publish all the chapters, you reread then so you don't get confused.
Thanks!
Trust me, when we're done editing and stuff, it's going to be SO AWESOME
I like to provide whatever editing I can when I read things. Second pair of eyes and all that...
Her hair had flattened out like it does when she's depressed.
-You changed tenses here.
She honestly liked Rarity, even though she had a ad temper, and felt bad about sending her away.
-Should be "bad temper" probably.
"Fuck off."
-CONSIDER "Buck off." for fandom specific jargon. Dunno if it is a good idea, just throwing it out their.
Did...did Rarity just say "fuck off?"
You warned that this story would be grimdark... and it emphatically is.
Aieee. I'll have nighmares about this opening!
Well done.
This made me laugh. I'm quite the evil one aren't I?
this......this is terrifying and horrifying, yet it is also one of the greatest stories i have ever read, and i have just begun. You have a true talent here, my of my friends write, one has a book published, and i read to the point that i am up for days at a time with various books. THIS KICKS ASS.
This bored me. Your grammar and narrative are great, though.
Fucking cunt I don't even snap like that and all it takes is one bucking funny or ANY LOOK AT ALL FOR ME TO BREAK SOMBODIES BUCKING NECK