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Amber Sin


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You... You... MONSTER!!!!

Good heavens, good heavens! YOU MONSTER!



But nice writing.

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I know, I'm horrible. But thanks :D

...It's Spike isn't it?

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Maybe ._.
or maybe it's an OC pony. Who knows :D

591 YOU... YOU MONSTER!!!!!!!!!!!!

if it really is spike I will never think of him the same way again

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Hah, that's the same thing one of my pre-readers said too.
I often don't see the characters as corrupted or different after reading fanfictions such as this, however. But that's just be haha

So...it's Luna?

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In the end the killer will be revealed.

:applecry: I am disapoint
But this is good
We must continue

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Oh, Nadiya.
Don't be disappoint.
I'm sure there are plenty of other fanfictions where the ponies die horribly c:

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So... where's Sweetie Belle? :rainbowderp: <--- feels wrong to use most smileys after reading the five chapters...

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I figured she'd be with the rest of the crusaders during most of the story. You know, having sleep overs and such. I didn't really want to involve her too much in the story because her and the rest of the crusaders are so cute and innocent, I don't want to mess with that. I might bring her and the others up in the next chapter, however.

I still will not stand down from my claim that you make me sick, albeit you are a very well-written sickster.

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Thank you :twilightsmile: I am proud of my ability to make people sick.

:pinkiecrazy:
Pinkie likes.
Continue.

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haha, thanks.
I am starting on chapter six right now :raritywink:

Evil Derpy is the best Derpy.

Pro-tip Dashie: Say the killer's name first.

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I'm extremely tired today (only five hours of sleep last night) so sorry for any confusion;
Throughout the story Nadiya (my friend who is helping with editing/basic plot) and I are trying to keep the killer's identity at a half and half sort of thing.
For example, in Grandmother's Mirror, Rarity comes up with the idea that Spike is the killer.
Yet, in Ditzy Delivers, Ditzy does not actually say the name of "the boss"
so therefore is could be Spike or it could be some other pony. (or maybe it's not even a pony...)
So if by that you meant "Say the killers name first so we know who it is" the point is so that you DON'T know who it is, exactly.
Sorry for the rant :twilightsheepish:

I am quite literally on the verge of vomiting right now. Not badly written, however.
I have a sneaking suspicion. I just hope I'm wrong.:ajsleepy:

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Ohh is it really that good? I don't want you to vomit but I'm happy that it gave you some sort of emotion!

Oh... oh my. :fluttershysad:
That was... very sad.
but nice writing....

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Really? I thought that story was Hilarious!

What a twist!

Though it does contradict before in Chapter 3 when the killer said "2 down, 3 more to go". If the killer is Twilight, it would have only been 2 more to go. :p

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Oh, you'll see.
The killer in that chapter could have been Twilight, Spike, or one of the other three helping Ditzy. Or even somepony else who is in on the secret that Twilight forgot to mention.
Don't you think that in the midst of killing, one would take the chance of getting to kill somepony who might have angered them in the past...?

OK:
Nadiya and I are doing major editing on the story and plot.
We came up with a BRILLIANT idea that will cause a lot of the past chapters to be edited to fir the new plot.
I suggest that when we are done editing and re-publish all the chapters, you reread then so you don't get confused.
Thanks!
Trust me, when we're done editing and stuff, it's going to be SO AWESOME :rainbowkiss:

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Have you actually done this yet? I'm thinking of reading the story, but not if you haven't done the major plot editing yet.

Luna's reaction at the end makes me wonder what she knows. At any rate it will be nice if two sides are fighting on somewhat even terms for a bit rather than just being a slam all the way for the 'bad guys'

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I'm pretty much finished. I'm planning on going through and check for spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes and stuff, but the plot is set for good.

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The Cough? Never heard of it. Being a huge fan of grimdark myself, I'll have to check it out.
I'm glad that you plan on reading my story sometime, though!

:twilightangry2: I want to stop reading this yet... but for some reason i cant!! Curse you good sir.

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*Ma'am not sir
I'm glad that you're enjoying it!
Wait, you aren't enjoying it that much, are you?
Then, I'm glad you're reading it anyway!

Umm, so was K, spike?

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If you haven't read all the chapters, then I cannot tell you.
If you have, then figure it yourself.

I like to provide whatever editing I can when I read things. Second pair of eyes and all that...

Her hair had flattened out like it does when she's depressed.
-You changed tenses here.

She honestly liked Rarity, even though she had a ad temper, and felt bad about sending her away.
-Should be "bad temper" probably.

"Fuck off."
-CONSIDER "Buck off." for fandom specific jargon. Dunno if it is a good idea, just throwing it out their.

I have a feeling that we will need you int he future.
-Misplaced space.

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Thanks for the help! I'll be sure to fix those things.

I just have one thing to say:

Why. :facehoof:

WHY. :pinkiecrazy:

WWWHHHHYYYYYYYYY. :raritydespair:

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Okay, one other thing:

THIS HAD BETTER NOT BE THE LAST CHAPTER!:flutterrage:

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Oh, it's not.
There's a few more chapters left.
Like, maybe three or four.

Yeah if I was Spike, I'd be looking for escape when Twilight said I wouldn't ever have to worry about that again.

Wow, interesting plot threads here. And making Gilda sympathetic! Nice work.

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Thanks!
This actually means a lot to me. This being my first fanfiction and all.

This is such a great story. I love it.

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Thank you!
I love that you love it.

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