the human in this story acts so dumb, he might as well be non-sapient. his complete incompetency in dealing with his situation actually makes this a little frustrating to read at parts. a bit more explanation as to how humans are viewed as simple pets considering they can talk would help smooth things, as well as perhaps playing up the pony supremacy vibe throughout the story, considering they seem to be the apex predators of the land. you clearly have a knack for technical storytelling otherwise though, so keep it up

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the human in this story acts so dumb, he might as well be non-sapient. his complete incompetency in dealing with his situation actually makes this a little frustrating to read at parts.

Oh? I'm not sure what you think he could have done, considering he's restricted and controlled by the collar the entire time, and subject to abuse and humiliation from the word go. Couple that with the fact the ponies refuse to see him for what he is, and he basically has a cow's chance in a slaughterhouse of survival. Speaking of...

a bit more explanation as to how humans are viewed as simple pets considering they can talk would help smooth things, as well as perhaps playing up the pony supremacy vibe throughout the story

I meant to show through Bon Bon's and Rainbow's reactions that ponies don't typically see the MC's behavior as normal or expected of humans. That is, ponies more don't know humans are sapient rather than that their sapience is disregarded. I suppose I could have done this a bit better, but the focus is obviously more on the fetish than the worldbuilding.

you clearly have a knack for technical storytelling otherwise though, so keep it up

Thanks!

The human parts were way less interesting than the chaos near the end. Would've liked it more if it was stated that Gilda ate Bon Bon before Pinkie ate Gilda, tho.

Uh-huh, how did I know that Hamster would be here?

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Lucky guess I suppose, or just obvious! But bro, mass deleting comments, even though they're negative, and even though we all know Hamster's a dick, this will sadly only make your stories age badly. Take it from someone who knows! This is the best advice I could give.

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And i'm also willing to bet that he placed all of your stories into those bad groups without your permission, am I right? If So, and I do believe I am, that definitely sounds like something Hammy would do!

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LOL, "bad groups". Just enclaves of wan'na be trolls. I'd bet was a troll before most of those fools were born!

-And I'll tell you what I told Hamster in PMs: If people can't handle seeing deleted comments, that's on them and their presumptions. Can't please the whole world, so I'm not gon'na try, so while I'm at it, I might as well also not deal with kink-shammers and other bullies.

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Well Hammy's on my general list of people to avoid group for a reason, just so you know!