Few notes on spelling and grammar: If there's a pause in speech, there needs to be a comma "," at the end. (e.g. "I'm Fred," he said.)
Also, it's confusing and incorrect to have multiple people speaking in the same line. To improve readability, it should be written as "<sentence>," person 1 asked. "<Sentence>," person 2 replied
As I began, I'd like to see where the story's headed.
very intersting however i dont think the person heading a UNSC ship is calleda ship master i think they are called a captain just a mistake i wanted to point out to u on the Covenant side however the captain of the ship is calleda ship master
its a good premise but the elites don't have the covenant anymore plus they just want peace now. No more absorbiton of species to their religion sorry to burst your bubble
my letter to celestia if I were in the UNSCs position: Dear Princess Dumbfuck The covenent will now either try to absorb you into their ranks on the winning team and you'll be evil but saved until we start to kick the Covenents ass or you join us and be good but probally all die horribly either way your officially fucked,boned, and up shit creek without a paddle for sending that shitty message--- and FUK you your no god lol
"You know we don't talk about them anymore, Luna. But other than 'them' we have never been visited by aliens" the sun Goddess spat, not angry at her sister but rather the aliens they owe both thanks and hatred to.
Interesting beginning.
Few notes on spelling and grammar: If there's a pause in speech, there needs to be a comma "," at the end. (e.g. "I'm Fred," he said.)
Also, it's confusing and incorrect to have multiple people speaking in the same line. To improve readability, it should be written as
"<sentence>," person 1 asked.
"<Sentence>," person 2 replied
As I began, I'd like to see where the story's headed.
very intersting however i dont think the person heading a UNSC ship is calleda ship master i think they are called a captain just a mistake i wanted to point out to u on the Covenant side however the captain of the ship is calleda ship master
Love it. Eagerly waiting for more.
"What kind of religious species would be hostile?" ... yep Celestia has won the award for Idiot of the Year.
its a good premise but the elites don't have the covenant anymore plus they just want peace now. No more absorbiton of species to their religion sorry to burst your bubble
Sending a message in which you say that you're a god sounds a bit cocky.
Don't 'cha think?
654191 Didn't you read the headers? This story takes place in 2531, long before the Sangheili split from the Covenant.
653025If there is one thing I have ever learned about religion in video games (Halo, Dead Space, Total War Medieval 2) it is that it is never good.
my letter to celestia if I were in the UNSCs position:
Dear Princess Dumbfuck
The covenent will now either try to absorb you into their ranks on the winning team and you'll be evil but saved until we start to kick the Covenents ass or you join us and be good but probally all die horribly
either way your officially fucked,boned, and up shit creek without a paddle for sending that shitty message--- and FUK you your no god lol
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And they would die by 31+ different factions just for saying that
"You have been reading too many Horsen Wells novels, sister."
Horsen Wells
Harrison Wells
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Who is them?