6319364 I'm not going to, just because she's in the cover art doesn't mean she will be in the story, besides, its the only pic I had that wasn't to explicit.
6319399 Well the short amount of words is my fault, I have a short attention span, so when I'm writing a Fan-fic i get distracted and I don't write alot of words.
6319453 Don't worry, Dash'll get her turn in the future, just gotta think of a story for that chapter, part of the problems with my stories is that I don't give them a very good story, I just think of an idea and write it in, that's the reason one of my other fan-fics, "My Date With a Strange Girl" has alot of dislikes.
6320180 Hmm, maybe you could help me make a second person fiction about her, but right now I'm still working on a story for the other chapters in this one.
This was well written, but god damn that went by too damn fast. You should probably rewrite this chapter and make it slower and a longer chapter. Again, I still think you have good writing potential.
6676029 KO well how about done doing them in order like the tags, the next should be Octaiva just hope the next chapter will be awesome for your readers.
6680516 KO tell me about it took me a few days to come up new chapters and wait for my sister to check them before I can publish then waiting for a few more days, but it's worth it when the chapter is done. anyway hope the next chapter come soon and keep up the good work.
6319308 So the reader can place themselves into the story, are you new here or something?
Ok this is moving faster than the speed of light ssslllooowww dddooowwwnnn.
6319349 There's only a couple days difference between you two...
6319308
I highly suggest you revoke this chapter and work on it more. Don't rush. You're going to get disliked to shit.
I mean, 600 words?
600?!
6319371 What? I thought there were more words then that, at least it felt like more words then that when I was writing it anyways.
6319364 I'm not going to, just because she's in the cover art doesn't mean she will be in the story, besides, its the only pic I had that wasn't to explicit.
6319379 Sorry if I come off as rude, dude. But I'd go to at least 1,500 words minimum for each chapter if I was you.
Not saying it's bad, but it could be better.
6319399 Well the short amount of words is my fault, I have a short attention span, so when I'm writing a Fan-fic i get distracted and I don't write alot of words.
6319444 I see. Just take your time. Don't try to rush.
Also, I call Dash.
6319453 Don't worry, Dash'll get her turn in the future, just gotta think of a story for that chapter, part of the problems with my stories is that I don't give them a very good story, I just think of an idea and write it in, that's the reason one of my other fan-fics, "My Date With a Strange Girl" has alot of dislikes.
kinda interested in seeing where this goes, think I'll wait for the rest of the chapters before starting though. Bookmarked and waiting
I'm not going to copy and paste my other comment, I'll just let you read it. I'll keep this in tracking, please utilize my advice.
Well written, but also likely to have been written by the Flash. xD
Moves WAAAY too fast, but other than that, you're a pretty good writer!
6319927 Thanks
6320161 Mhm!
6319256 I was going to suggest queen chrysalis.
6320180 Hmm, maybe you could help me make a second person fiction about her, but right now I'm still working on a story for the other chapters in this one.
6320202 Sure thing, just shoot me a PM if you need me to pre read it.
6320229 Will do.
This was well written, but god damn that went by too damn fast. You should probably rewrite this chapter and make it slower and a longer chapter. Again, I still think you have good writing potential.
KO hope your still continuing this cause it's good and who will be next. (but hopefully it's Rainbow Dash).
6320232 KO is the next chapter coming soon.
6482263 Yeah, It's gonna be awhile, I haven't got an idea for it yet.
6676029 KO well how about done doing them in order like the tags, the next should be Octaiva just hope the next chapter will be awesome for your readers.
6676404 Okay, I had thought writing a clop fiction would be easy... I was wrong! It's hard work!
6680516 KO tell me about it took me a few days to come up new chapters and wait for my sister to check them before I can publish then waiting for a few more days, but it's worth it when the chapter is done. anyway hope the next chapter come soon and keep up the good work.