Applejack's POV
(Sweet Apple Acres)
I wiped the sweat off my brow and gathered the rest of the apples I picked. "That's the last of 'em." I said to myself, relieved. "That should be enough for the party Pinkie's planin' after the big match."
"Eeyup" Big Mac replied from next to me.
"I better get these inside the barn." I said. "Eeyup." He replied again.
I walked off.
The barn came I to view quickly, but, I saw a black figure enter. I raised an eyebrow and quickly walked towards it. I entered and saw...nothing? "What the?...I was sure I saw someone...hmm must've been seeing things with what stuff quiet around here."
I said and started whistling as I kept the apples in the crates. I heard the door close again. "Hmm?" I looked back but nothing...I shrugged.
"I need more sleep." I muttered.
Mystery's POV
"SHADOW FORM, YOU FOOL!!!! You could have been caught or worse revealed our plans!!!" I screamed.
"B-but your highness, I would never." Shadow Form whimpered.
"You were almost caught two times how can I let that pass?!?!?!!!" I screamed some more.
"I'm sorry" he whispered.
"If you do it again I will see to it that you are relieved from duty!! Is that clear?!" I asked.
"Y-yes your majesty"
"You're lucky I'm nice. Now off with you." I commanded.
He bowed and left.
"What am I going to do with them?" I sighed and gritted my teeth
Your story is very interesting. However, there are some grammatical and punctuational mistakes.
If you want, I could help you pre-read it.
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6353207 you will get more in chapter 7 ;)
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