Why do I feel like in the end she and Johnny will get together?

Why?

Another good chapter but it could use some tender-loving editing. Not trying to be rude, just saying that it would read a lot better. Looking forward to the next!

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You're right, and this is after I chose to cut some stuff out. I hope I'll have the chance to put that stuff in later, assuming I remember what that stuff was.

Hopefully I'll do a better job in future chapters.

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Maybe you're a hardcore follower of cliches?

I know I am.

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Hey man, just take your time, do what you've gotta do to make in shiny. If it takes an extra day or so, it's usually worth it. That's why I don't give myself rigid deadlines. I adhere to a schedule (kind of) but quality first, amirite?

But hey, you're weaving a good story together so keep it up!

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Maybe or maybe because before they started talking and stuff I was like. " You're gonna marry a guy from the bar . or at least get into a relationship with him! Yaaaas hunty!"

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Weaving a good story? That's giving me too much credit.

I just got a bunch of ideas in my head about how I wanted DeWitt's story to go and I'm trying to string them together.