7172902 Again, apologies for keeping everypony waiting, and thanks to you and all of my regular readers. Hell, I'd resumed work on this chapter not even a day before I got a notice that the fic had made it into someone's folder of "Not likely to be updated", and that was the moment that I went from "I should work on this more" to "I NEED to work on this more."
7172910 Oh, he is. And do I ever have a plan for him~
I'm so happy you made it to the featured box. Congratulations! I can't tell you how wonderful it is to see this alive again, Topside! Of the dozens and dozens of Sombra stories I've read since I first set hoof on FIMFiction, I still treasure this one in the top three of my list and often refer to it as the "smoky, sexy Sombra tale" to anyone where it comes up in discussion. Heh, I even adapted the phrase "crapbaskets", getting a giggle out of the many Sombraphiles who are my friends here on the site.
It still has me hooked. I don't often critique, preferring to go with my general gut feeling of how good a story is in how it made me feel, and I am still retaining that feeling from the earlier chapters to this new one. I love your take on Sombra. It is truly unique from all the others and works so well here - and for him.
This is... still too early to make much of a determining call on what was originally a one shot, the plot is slowly coming together it seems, but we aren't sure whether Sombra means to be 'evil' this time around, or where events might be heading. That's probably what will make/break it for me. Mind you, I don't expect him to go all nice and happy on everyone, but I am hoping you don't go all evil, get revenge on princesses once I've gathered my strength.
Now, my personal opinions aside, it's not bad for a mix of 2nd person and 3rd person, and it does have promise. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on it to see just what direction it is you are taking this in. Good luck on the future writings!
7173108 Comments like this are what make me glad I have a fairly cohesive plan for this fic.
If anypony wants to just see this as it develops, do not mouse over the text below. While deliberately vague, it is still what I would consider a spoiler.
I've gone through some amount of trouble to map out not only what is going to happen in the coming days/weeks for Sombra, but what happened a thousand years ago when the Empire first disappeared. Suffice it to say, while everypony's memories are trustworthy and intact, nopony ACTUALLY knows all of what truly led up to that time...and how it could have all been avoided.
Nice to see this story again. Really hope the next chapters explain how Sombra and Shy fell in love.
THANK GOD IT LIVES
Real glad to see this up. And that Sombra is actually one of the most sane ponies.
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Again, apologies for keeping everypony waiting, and thanks to you and all of my regular readers. Hell, I'd resumed work on this chapter not even a day before I got a notice that the fic had made it into someone's folder of "Not likely to be updated", and that was the moment that I went from "I should work on this more" to "I NEED to work on this more."
7172910
Oh, he is. And do I ever have a plan for him~
I'm so happy you made it to the featured box. Congratulations! I can't tell you how wonderful it is to see this alive again, Topside! Of the dozens and dozens of Sombra stories I've read since I first set hoof on FIMFiction, I still treasure this one in the top three of my list and often refer to it as the "smoky, sexy Sombra tale" to anyone where it comes up in discussion. Heh, I even adapted the phrase "crapbaskets", getting a giggle out of the many Sombraphiles who are my friends here on the site.
It still has me hooked. I don't often critique, preferring to go with my general gut feeling of how good a story is in how it made me feel, and I am still retaining that feeling from the earlier chapters to this new one. I love your take on Sombra. It is truly unique from all the others and works so well here - and for him.
Welcome back!
This is... still too early to make much of a determining call on what was originally a one shot, the plot is slowly coming together it seems, but we aren't sure whether Sombra means to be 'evil' this time around, or where events might be heading. That's probably what will make/break it for me. Mind you, I don't expect him to go all nice and happy on everyone, but I am hoping you don't go all evil, get revenge on princesses once I've gathered my strength.
Now, my personal opinions aside, it's not bad for a mix of 2nd person and 3rd person, and it does have promise. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on it to see just what direction it is you are taking this in. Good luck on the future writings!
7173108
Comments like this are what make me glad I have a fairly cohesive plan for this fic.
If anypony wants to just see this as it develops, do not mouse over the text below. While deliberately vague, it is still what I would consider a spoiler.
I've gone through some amount of trouble to map out not only what is going to happen in the coming days/weeks for Sombra, but what happened a thousand years ago when the Empire first disappeared. Suffice it to say, while everypony's memories are trustworthy and intact, nopony ACTUALLY knows all of what truly led up to that time...and how it could have all been avoided.