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R'lyeh? OSHIT!
Jack sounds like a reincarnation of Chuck Norris With two katanas
Well, I can see you've got the characters down right. Right now there are only three things that bug me slightly.
1: Typoes. They're fine, but I would advise getting a pre/proof-reader.
2: changing from past tense to present at inappropriate times.
In a narration, present tense is only to be used for dialogue or inner thoughts. No, changing to present tense randomly isn't a style of writing. There's no such thing as a style of writing. There's only languages and specific rules that have to be followed.
3: Do note this one is just a suggestion: When proclaiming inner thoughts, one should use '
example: 'Well this is awkward.' , thought the leathery creature, shifting from toe to paw.