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“Mess” is actually a good way to describe Coalescence. While the Crystal Wasteland isn’t a good place by any means, it has much more stability to it than the regular Wasteland. I tried to reflect the dichotomy of the settings with plot’s overall structure. Severance was more like a linear adventure, while Coalescence was all over the place. But now that Symphony has come to accept the Wasteland and his place in it, his life is regaining a sense of structure. There’s still some chaos but not as much. As a result, Appetence goes back to being more of an adventure with a few wrenches thrown into the mix.
I’m glad you’re enjoying the story, and I’m really excited to get started on the new arc!
I really enjoyed this story, are you still continuing because there are some good characters here!
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Yes, I am. Unfortunately, work on Appetance has been slow. That's mostly been because I got distracted with a shiny new project. With that finished, Crystal Hearts should be getting a lot more of my focus. I hope to start releasing chapters in February.
So nice seeing Greek letters and all that, but since like no one of your reader base properly know Greek would it properly be for the best to turn the Greek letters into latin ones, keeping the Greek words, just changing the letters out. Like no one knows what "γάμος" sounds like spoken, but write "gámos" and people will at least know how this forein sounds like.
HA! Always love math logic like that. Seeing characters going from 1/4th of the loot to 1/8th of the loot since they want a raise is also a lovely joke
So another arc of the story is over... And I do really not know what to think. This is perhaps the only story that I have read, beside PH, that have gone so much up and down in quality. at least are this story looking to be going up again where PH crashed for me. So for upwards and onwards!
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"Finally, Zeus stood up. “Dionysus!” Dionysus pressed his front hooves over his mouth and lowered his head. “Thank you.”
Dionysus nodded. He lowered his hooves and thankfully didn’t start talking. He did keep bouncing in place. " linebreak, for both lines
"Dionysus turned to face his father." Linebreak
"“The last pony you ever want to aim a gun at, Wings" Linebreak
". I wasn’t really how to communicate wat happened to each without differentiating." feels like you are missing a few words, and "what"
". Te ghoul head in Severance was the Magic totem" the