Rumble's an incubus now, and he has some interesting powers over peoples' affections. He fears that he might not be fully in control over this power when Flitter and Cloudchaser become a little closer to him than usual.
So, succubi and incubi can sense and manipulate auras, and can give relationships the nudge they need to get started, like Cadence? Being picked up so easily by butterflies must be a pegasus thing. Glad to see Rumble is trying to be responsible with his powers, hopefully most other ponies in his situation are trying to be responsible as well. First comment!
I just need a head's up and confirmation: Incubi and succubi are the same thing, just incubi are males (like Rumble) and succubi are female (like Vinyl Scratch), right??? Other than gender, they are one and the same, right??
5625447 Pretty much yeah. The other differences only matter when you start looking into arcane matters for the purposes of Rituals and such, and even then, sometimes it doesn't matter much at all
Generally speaking I like your loose romance "universe" that Spike, Rumble, and the rest exist in. But Rumble having this power is just sort of lame. I mean, he has all the power. He can manipulate them any way he wants if I'm understanding it correctly. There is no tension of getting the girl, or screwing up if he has total control. It feels like I'm just watching it go through the motions. This being clop, that's sort of the point, but still..
You do generally set up your characters with moral dilemmas. Spike's had them before, so I can see it working out here. But even so I can't help but think Rumble is just too good. Even if that's the point.
edit: I'm just voicing thoughts as I read this. As it's not finished, don't necessarily take this as criticism.
5629332 The dilemma is that he doesn't know whether or not he's controlling Flitter. If he manipulated one of his closest friends into sleeping with him, he essentially raped her. He keeps trying to convince himself that he's in control, but he doesn't know for certain.
I just hope you can keep it interesting. Spike and Rumble being such studs in a way to tell a story, sure. But it can get boring seeing them win out all the time.
5630959 That's why I'm branching off to other characters' already existing relationships, and having Spike settle down with Sweetie Belle while still keeping his herd.
Well, I have to say, this has both very hot sex, good characterization, and a good moral dilemma. I'm going to enjoy this.
Though couldn't he just ask Vinyl for advice if he's so worried about it? I don't know if cubi have rules about it in this verse, but it would make sense - especially if cubi have extended lifespans - if a cubi is responsible for any who they make cubi for the first decade or so. Not in the sense they have to stick around like a sire, but in the sense they need to be available to answer any questions, clear up any issues...and if the created cubi becomes a monster who threatens the well being of the cubi, eliminate them.
So, succubi and incubi can sense and manipulate auras, and can give relationships the nudge they need to get started, like Cadence? Being picked up so easily by butterflies must be a pegasus thing. Glad to see Rumble is trying to be responsible with his powers, hopefully most other ponies in his situation are trying to be responsible as well. First comment!
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I just need a head's up and confirmation: Incubi and succubi are the same thing, just incubi are males (like Rumble) and succubi are female (like Vinyl Scratch), right??? Other than gender, they are one and the same, right??
5625447 Pretty much yeah. The other differences only matter when you start looking into arcane matters for the purposes of Rituals and such, and even then, sometimes it doesn't matter much at all
I... don't know how I feel about this.
Generally speaking I like your loose romance "universe" that Spike, Rumble, and the rest exist in. But Rumble having this power is just sort of lame. I mean, he has all the power. He can manipulate them any way he wants if I'm understanding it correctly. There is no tension of getting the girl, or screwing up if he has total control. It feels like I'm just watching it go through the motions. This being clop, that's sort of the point, but still..
You do generally set up your characters with moral dilemmas. Spike's had them before, so I can see it working out here. But even so I can't help but think Rumble is just too good. Even if that's the point.
edit: I'm just voicing thoughts as I read this. As it's not finished, don't necessarily take this as criticism.
5629332 The dilemma is that he doesn't know whether or not he's controlling Flitter. If he manipulated one of his closest friends into sleeping with him, he essentially raped her. He keeps trying to convince himself that he's in control, but he doesn't know for certain.
5629623 makes sense. That's a good angle.
I just hope you can keep it interesting. Spike and Rumble being such studs in a way to tell a story, sure. But it can get boring seeing them win out all the time.
5630959 That's why I'm branching off to other characters' already existing relationships, and having Spike settle down with Sweetie Belle while still keeping his herd.
Well, I have to say, this has both very hot sex, good characterization, and a good moral dilemma. I'm going to enjoy this.
Though couldn't he just ask Vinyl for advice if he's so worried about it? I don't know if cubi have rules about it in this verse, but it would make sense - especially if cubi have extended lifespans - if a cubi is responsible for any who they make cubi for the first decade or so. Not in the sense they have to stick around like a sire, but in the sense they need to be available to answer any questions, clear up any issues...and if the created cubi becomes a monster who threatens the well being of the cubi, eliminate them.
You bloody genius. That was great. It was all to great. Looking forward to more. :)
HOLLY HELL, that was awesome, where is the rest?
5739025 Don't worry, it's coming. I just need to focus on other stuff for a while.
5739109 I would be willing to help you write more for this, if you would allow that
5739150 Well, if you feel you can work well with my writing style, that'd be wonderful. I'll contact you when I need you.
CDaWH was an amazing story, one of my favorites in a long time.
Seeing a sequel to my favorite part of such a story.
Yes please!
~TOOWC
Hot.
Rumble how'd you get so fly...?