I was worried poor pinkie was gonna get a broken heart.

Read again... loved it this time around.

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Thats wonderful to hear. I hope to have the next chapter done soonish. So look out for that.

7492916 10 weeks is soon?
I'd hate to see what it will be a while is.

sorry if this seems insulting it's just i get annoyed when good writers leave unfinished stories that are really really good.

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Not a problem my friend unfortunately i understand completely. Other stuff took priority than life got in the way than i ended up on vacation you will be happy to know that i am at this moment penning the next chapter (obviously not right right now as im typing this but you know what i mean.)

Thank you very much for the compliment by the way.

7692102 understand i'm kind of behind on my own stories but that is why they are in hiatus (or however you spell it)
put in tracking along with 50 other stories

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Ahhh i see, i never truly stop working on something it just kinda slows as i have the bad habit of broadening the scope, rewriting and working on 5+ projects at once.

7692215 i only have five and three were so bad i deleted them the other is the revulion of equestria, however i have a new one that is still in the early stages(ignore bad spelling)

however i will be waiting and watching in the future for updates. however i'm going to cach up on the 3 hours of sleep i have left before life.

The story itself is nice, and it certainly caught the aspects that smut stories should have(my more or less recent fascination with gay!Spike not helping matters), but the writing was horrendous in the first, and gradually shifted to 'okay' towards the third chapter. There wasn't much romance so far, in my opinion. Maybe expanding on Twilight/Spike dialog would help. Or there will be more of it with the coming of Pinkie.

Oh, and you seriously should add Pinkie tag. She's already made two serious appearances, and only a completely blind person will not understand how important she's to the story.

Be waiting for more

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Yeah like i said this is the very first thing ive ever written but i am determined to finish it without majorly overhauling the story so i am doing what i can to expand and change things through updates and better flesh out their characters. In the beginning i was god awful at dialog (Which is why there was so little) now im just barely not half bad.

In that moment Twilight couldn't help but tempt fate and think. Maybe everything can work out.

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Princess Luna: Prepare thy self for the hurting of the posterior!