This is mostly ok, but how did Homage knew every single detail of the fight, like the gun calibre of a weapon she probably doesn't know?

You need an editor.

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Depends on just how good the cameras in the towers are. If they're spy satellite quality, she might be able to have read the headstamp on the empty brass. Older satellites are supposed to be able to be able to read a newspaper headline from orbit, so it's not out of the question for those cameras to be similarly powerful.

4645967 You chose your username on purpose, didn't you? I can appreciate that 'Mech, but I'm more of a Cataphract pilot myself.

Not bad, but would it kill you to put some paragraphs during the action. :P

"...mother of the filly was kill just inside of the door of the library"

But what if she was not kill?