A being from the stars seeks the ultimate hunt. Can Equestria's greatest heroines overcome the Huntsman and his powers? Or will it fall to his great hunger? Warning: contains adult and fetish elements.
I'm giving you a down vote for the grammer, everything else is good but when the Huntsman was eating Fluttershy you made it seem like she was eating him at first. Minor complaint and hope you get an editor. I'll still favorite this though.
4588271 Well someone has to tear you a new one and I recently had that done to me so.... and also, are they from the DC universe? Cause I have the feeling they are from there.
I don't like tearing people new ones unless their protagonists are awful and we are meant to agree with them, the story is REALLY badly written and with bad detail and huge errors, or if the author is a misanthrope like Chatvoyance. But if you wanna know who made that cover pic I chose? His name is Ed McGuinness. Big comic book artist.
So let me get this straight. First off his kind goes planet to planet starting fights to see if they are worthy of living and if not then they are wiped out. WTF? Not even a rematch to try to stave off an extinction? And the two alicorns fighting him could stop him when they could defeat Discord, a being that defies pretty much everything with the snap of his fingers. It seems like your Cosmo Sapien is over powered to the point where he could probably take on Discord or Tirek alone. And your spelling errors that was around, tweak that up.
So let me get this straight. First off his kind goes planet to planet starting fights to see if they are worthy of living and if not then they are wiped out. WTF? Not even a rematch to try to stave off an extinction?
One, all they need do is injure one of these beings enough. Just make them bleed...and they'll leave. And if not, they just eat until they're all full. Hopefully for whatever race endures this that doesn't mean outright extinction.
...hopefully.
And the two alicorns fighting him could stop him when they could defeat Discord, a being that defies pretty much everything with the snap of his fingers.
To be fair, they caught Discord off-guard. He's never serious. If he was, he's probably put up more of a challenge to them. And two, this thing IS a living galaxy. He's not going to be a pushover. I think you meant to say "couldn't"...more than likely they COULD have if they'd kept going, but by ending the fight there, it might have saved one of their lives.
But yeah. I do need to work on my spelling errors. I'm trying to fix that. And also to show what our protagonists can and CAN'T do to fight him. I think I've given away something of a hint in this first chapter...mainly in how he treats others...to show that despite being incredibly dangerous, he still has a sense of integrity to appeal to, a sense of honor and compassion. Therein might be the solution. Of course...it's only the first chapter. I've still got a ways to go.
I'm giving you a down vote for the grammer, everything else is good but when the Huntsman was eating Fluttershy you made it seem like she was eating him at first. Minor complaint and hope you get an editor. I'll still favorite this though.
Where did you get the story title image picture?
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Thank you kindly. I'm not the best when it comes to Grammar.
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Ah, that I'll address soon. It's sort of a reference for a certain crowd to pick up on.
4588271 Well someone has to tear you a new one and I recently had that done to me so.... and also, are they from the DC universe? Cause I have the feeling they are from there.
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I don't like tearing people new ones unless their protagonists are awful and we are meant to agree with them, the story is REALLY badly written and with bad detail and huge errors, or if the author is a misanthrope like Chatvoyance. But if you wanna know who made that cover pic I chose? His name is Ed McGuinness. Big comic book artist.
This story seems pretty cool I'm gonna fav and like it let's see where this goes I'll be watching
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Thank you! :D
So let me get this straight. First off his kind goes planet to planet starting fights to see if they are worthy of living and if not then they are wiped out. WTF? Not even a rematch to try to stave off an extinction? And the two alicorns fighting him could stop him when they could defeat Discord, a being that defies pretty much everything with the snap of his fingers. It seems like your Cosmo Sapien is over powered to the point where he could probably take on Discord or Tirek alone. And your spelling errors that was around, tweak that up.
One, all they need do is injure one of these beings enough. Just make them bleed...and they'll leave. And if not, they just eat until they're all full. Hopefully for whatever race endures this that doesn't mean outright extinction.
...hopefully.
To be fair, they caught Discord off-guard. He's never serious. If he was, he's probably put up more of a challenge to them. And two, this thing IS a living galaxy. He's not going to be a pushover. I think you meant to say "couldn't"...more than likely they COULD have if they'd kept going, but by ending the fight there, it might have saved one of their lives.
But yeah. I do need to work on my spelling errors. I'm trying to fix that. And also to show what our protagonists can and CAN'T do to fight him. I think I've given away something of a hint in this first chapter...mainly in how he treats others...to show that despite being incredibly dangerous, he still has a sense of integrity to appeal to, a sense of honor and compassion. Therein might be the solution. Of course...it's only the first chapter. I've still got a ways to go.
Hmm, i'm just guessing here but, is this some kind of crossover with Grant Morrison's Seven Soliders?
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Yeah! the Cosmo Sapien is the race of Nebula Man, a Justice League of America/Seven Soldiers of Victory villain.
Kill the underlines and bolding. The inflection will come naturally without them.
hmmmm...
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So, seems like he isn't really a 'villain' in the traditional sense, as there doesn't seem to be any sort of malice behind his actions.