A mare and her husband have a strange, interesting day, one that they both find highly enjoyable. Sometimes, stepping into somepony else's horseshoes can be a fun thing.
This is an excellently written introduction chapter to a seemingly loving couple. For only 4,200 words, characterization is provided enough to get a basic understanding of the two characters involved, as well as provide a foundation for how the body swap takes place.
I especially liked the notion of magical ley-lines, and the bit the writer did here with the manipulation of them to change the basic senses, such as tasting with touch, or hearing with one's eyes.
Will this be continued? The first chapter was CERTAINLY worth my while. I could give it a favorite if it got continued, but, alas, I only favorite multi-chapter stories... What a shame, a Sir Author.
4431498 Thanks! I do take care with my intros; they're what hook people into reading more, after all. I'm glad you liked what you saw, and I hope you continue to enjoy reading about Star and Aileris' life together.
4436837 That is a question without a straightforward answer. I do have a rather extensive back-story for them and their families, but that isn't published anywhere. I also started writing a piece with them in it that's set after this is, but then the body swap contest came up, and I realized that they would be able to fit into it. That story is also not published.
Probably the best way to look at this situation is as an example of starting a narrative in media res. That is to say, the story picks up in the middle, and I, the author, fill in background over time, slowly bringing things to light. If something doesn't make sense now, that's likely because I am trying to build suspense or anticipation for its eventual reveal.
4438895 Why but of course! I'm glad you liked it, and I would like to kindly remind you to favourite it to get the update when the next chapter comes out. Hopefully I'll see you then.
This is an excellently written introduction chapter to a seemingly loving couple. For only 4,200 words, characterization is provided enough to get a basic understanding of the two characters involved, as well as provide a foundation for how the body swap takes place.
I especially liked the notion of magical ley-lines, and the bit the writer did here with the manipulation of them to change the basic senses, such as tasting with touch, or hearing with one's eyes.
Will this be continued? The first chapter was CERTAINLY worth my while. I could give it a favorite if it got continued, but, alas, I only favorite multi-chapter stories... What a shame, a Sir Author.
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Lo! It shall continue indeed, my numeric spectra friend. A second chapter is already in the works!
4427357 Huzzah and good show, friend!
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*holds it captive
*no ransom note is issued
I must say that this is one of the best intro's i have read here. It shows great promise for future chapters. Keep up the good work!
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Thanks! I do take care with my intros; they're what hook people into reading more, after all. I'm glad you liked what you saw, and I hope you continue to enjoy reading about Star and Aileris' life together.
4431729 i am sure i will!
I don't follow this at all... Are these characters from another of your stories?
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That is a question without a straightforward answer. I do have a rather extensive back-story for them and their families, but that isn't published anywhere. I also started writing a piece with them in it that's set after this is, but then the body swap contest came up, and I realized that they would be able to fit into it. That story is also not published.
Probably the best way to look at this situation is as an example of starting a narrative in media res. That is to say, the story picks up in the middle, and I, the author, fill in background over time, slowly bringing things to light. If something doesn't make sense now, that's likely because I am trying to build suspense or anticipation for its eventual reveal.
mmmm this is gettin' gooood~.... another please?
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Why but of course! I'm glad you liked it, and I would like to kindly remind you to favourite it to get the update when the next chapter comes out. Hopefully I'll see you then.