There was no reason ta add this to Life in Manehattan. That group is fer Manehattanverse stories - an alternate universe that this definitely doesn't fit into. Ah'm gonna remove it.

4198068 could you please explain what is making the manhatan vers stand out?

4198089
In the Manehattanverse, the Summer Sun Celebration was held in Manehattan instead of Ponyville, because the Elements of Harmony had been moved to a museum. Consequently, Twilight lives in Manehattan, not Ponyville, and the other bearers of the Elements are Honey "Daring" Do, Blossomforth, Trixie, "Auntie" Orange Sherbet, and Octavia.

4198089

Why the hell did you add this to Hooves, Wings, and Rocketships? This isn't remotely related.

Oh... I've seen you before. You're the one who wrote "A Mirror Gate Adoptable." Jesus Christ you're a piece of work.

4198100 Aside from the home of 2 ponies, nothing is contradicting it.
kind of hard to go around that detail.
guess you can as well remove it if you haven't already?

Wow.
Word to the author; don't quit your day job.

4198119 Isn'tt the group about fying ponies? it is at least what the page stated.
would you be as kind as to explain why this isn't related to the group?
have the story already contradicted the premis of the group in any way?

4198152
That an' Fluttershy doesn't have incestuous vampire offspring. That's... kind of important.

4198156 naeh, writing for this site doesn't pay enough to motivate that.
besides, my job involves ponies too. they're just not quite as colourful as here.

4198179 it is supposed to be years after Season 4.
I chose Fluters in part, because she is the only pony who has ever been Canon as bat pony.
The others just happen to be good at what I wanted them to do, aside from being frinds.

I had to slip a few ideas based on interpretation of who they are, more in person too.

4198267
Okay? That's kinda the point, though. Everything you jus' said is not related to the Manehattanverse, individually an' specifically.

4198287 does the Manhattenverse not allow for time jumps?
I never mentioned the Elements either.

Just hope none was mean enough to down-vote over a small misinterpretation.
That isn't what the vote is for in the first place.

The story is supposed to be good on its own, not based on what verse it was supposedly based on, or not.

Maybe I should slip into the Summary that time had passed since the Canon of Season 4?

4198317
It's not good, though. An' it doesn't matter whether or not stories set in the future are acceptable in the Manehattanverse, the fact is that this story has nothing to do with the Manehattanverse. There is nothing in it that would even remotely qualify it as a Manehattanverse story.

4198361 not even the fact that it is in Manehattan, then?

Just that since the first details are off, I'm not going to check how to mak the rest work.
so, thanks for explaining.

if you don't like the story, for this or any other reason is up to you.

Seems others enjoy the story, that's all I need to know.

4198168

It's a group about space travel.

4198395

The Manehattanverse is a specific continuity, and as such needs to focus on specific people and events. Just because this "could happen" in the Manehattanverse doesn't mean that it belongs in the group. In fact, if you're describing it as something that "could happen" in any continuity, it probably doesn't belong there.

Also, I'd really like to meet the people who enjoy this story. As far as I can tell, they don't exist.

4198476 if it is the way I read this, it should be made clear up front.
That's not what I red on the group page.

The description 'Mentioned' spaceflight, but didn't explicitely limit it to it.
Aironout has nothing to do with space, that's an Astronout, in plain English.

Maybe I did not read the description of that group carefully enough,
I will not post a story in Manehattan again, don't worry.

4198501

Well, no offense, but you don't exactly look like someone who has the best reading comprehension skills.

4198526 I may have a few gaps, but not worse then most, by what I've seen.

If you have enjoyed the space travel group as long as the site has it,
you may have noticed my other story on the group?
I hope that story is more to your liking, then, since it is clearly about Space Flight too.

4198557

No, I have not noticed your other story on the group. Perhaps you could tell me which story in your grotesquely inflated repertoire it is. "The Lovely Little Changeling," perhaps, or "My Little Changeling, and I," or "The Happy Little Changeling?"

4198806 Sorry, none of these.
the story is named Star Tracker of the Ship Harmony.
maybe it isn't the best of the Star Trek Crosses on the site, but I hope it has some interesting to it.
unlike this story, it isn't published today, so I have had more time to go over it.
I had to 'Invent' the Equestrian ship, since as far as I know, there can be no Canon ship there.
There is a nice enterprise 1701E from the other side to enjoy, and a full crew, even if I'm not mentioning more then a few from the top.

4198840

Ah yes. If you'd actually checked, you'd see I left several comments. It certainly is not the best of the Star Trek Crosses on the site, and it doesn't really have any interesting to it at all.

4198868 the story is merely 5,000 words this far, and it hasn't really been much on the space flight either, I'm merely presenting the premis, I guess.
Aside from the Obvious, what would you like to see in a story?

4198894

I would like to see stories that are not written by you. I've had the bad fortune of running into your stories quite a lot. It seems you do a lot of "merely presenting the premis."

4198906 sorry, that's the one thing I can't help you with.
In my case, I generally expect my stories to be better, the longer they are.
In part because I'm not too good at short stories or 'One-shots'.
if it isn't too much to ask, I had hoped you could point at category, character or something more tangible?
sme probably had prefered I specialised more, rather then just make a new and different story every other day?

Oh, maybe I should check your one story, in hope for a clue as to what you like?
I'd expect you to write about what you like, and in a style you enjoy.

just noticed something, someone seems to enjoy down-voting my every comment here?
it's just a bit too consistant to be right here, or are my comments that bad?

I know, votes can't be traced by users, i'd imagine that's why they vote without care.

4198970

I'd be willing to bet you're not too good at any sort of story. As for the votes, it seems to be from from more than just one person.

As for not being able to help; well, I imagine you could do quite a bit more than you think.

4198995 some stories are more popular then others.
just as I can see some are better then other stories too.
if they are good would be up to the reader, at least to a good point.

Only need 3 IDs, which isn't too hard to handle for a single individual.
if you're only using it to down vote,it would be hard to track, unless you are at least a moderator of the site, or have higher access to what can't be seen by regular users like me.

One could always ask friends to vote for, or against someone or something?

Are my repplies consistantly bad, while the others consitantly good?
This is a bit hard for me to see, if you don't mind me pointing it out.

4199044

I've had no hand in manipulating vote counts on your comments or your stories. I don't need to, trust me.

4199052 Good thing I did not imply it was you.
if I am to cast blame, from the comments as basis,
it is more likely it is someone of the once who commented earlier?

Even moe likely is that the individual never commented at all.

From responses other then the comments on the story,
I feel I have reason to believe others do enjoy the story.(premise)

Just curious, knowing the bats are from season 4, so there is very little basis for stories like this,
have you seen any stories with similiar ideas uin them?
Crosses could easily explain vampires, after all?
I did take inspiration from a few such shows on how the story is going.(Phantom Corp I.N.C.)

4198970

I generally expect my stories to be better, the longer they are.

...Why would you expect that?

I'm not sure if you understand the rules to this sort of thing. For one, don't expect your story to be good just because it's long. The reason why others are long is because we fans beg for longer stories. Longer stories won't get you more likes or attention. It's the storyline, what you wrote, and how it makes sense, as well as how it fits.

Story is okay, but don't put judgement on it. Another rule is no what if's or could've. Based on the comments I read, I see that you tried to do Flutter-Bat, just become her only being cannon on bats.

Not true.

Anyone could try having their OC's as bats, but no one does it (Or most don't) because it's smarter to not do it at all! Unless your a popular writer, than you can get away with a few, but no one else can. Bat ponies are a thing, but no one tries because it's hard to come up with a story! So don't try to put Fluttershy in this one. If you knew you couldn't do it, erase or delete it and try something else.

And, last but not least, Manehatten. That's it. I'm guessing that only stories involving crime can really work in this city, but none other than that. I haven't seen any episode about Manehatten (Just joined last year, cut me some slack), but I guess Readers don't like the idea of Manehatten. Just stay in Ponyville. Makes more sense that way than trying a different idea.

I must honestly say though, you were seriously brave to try a differen idea, but if it doesn't seem right in your head, don't continue. Trust me, I did this same mistake once.

But, other than that, two out of five mustaches!

4199108

Phantom Corporation Incorporated? Color me skeptical.

4199137 now you're talking of a common mistake; trying to cover up a bad story, merely by adding chapters and words to it?
Stories are paced after how long you're making it.
Can't write a Novel in the same way you'd write a 'Short-Story'.(I may be more of the Novelist)

I have other stories with Bat-Ponies too, all depending on what the premice of said stories require.
I have Canon, OC or derivatives, depending on which made most sense as I wrote the characters into the story. In this case, I chose foals of Flutter-Shy, but not just because she is canon as bat.
I chose her for her characteristics, such as I interpreted her to be, as well as her friends.

for now, she is merely mentioned, if I will actually include her is for later.
I enjoy flutters, because she have a very good depth, you may have seen some of it?
I know I have missed episodes, but I think I have a good idea of her, since I followeed MLP for quite a while.

Manehattan is a convenient City, f you like to write crime stories, I can follow you here.
For now, I have only one story including mentioned crimes, but I doubt that is in manehattan.
No idea where 'Prince Blueblood' lives. that story isn't bound to a specific community.
It's a 'Pinkamena' story, so I had her go out on a spree, in the spirit I interpretted only she could perform it. Trying to explore and make use of her Antics.

Trying new ideas, that's what I like to do. why bother going, where everyone have already been?
who wil remember me, if I'm the last writing a story on the premis, and not being particularly bettwe then the once before me? These stories I can safely leave by th side of the road.

I like to write 'complete' stories, even if I do write a few more thematic episode stories.
Guess it is a matter of if you enjoy how I blend the various components into a story?

Two out of five, sounds like just below Average?
I hope it is worth trying to 'Salvage', from your perspective.
Seems I have a few enjoying it.

4199182 Phantom Quest Corp, it's an anime show I happened to catch a few episode discs off of.
I just checked the discs to see, the exact name.
it include Vampires, and numerous other 'super-Natural' 'Creatures'.

I'm trying to collect all the good Anime I can get my hands on.
The collection is not quite as larg as I'd like it to be, sadly.

4199255

(I may be more of the Novelist)

Except you don't have any story longer than 25k words, and only 3 out of 44 are complete, the longest of which being 4k words.

Just passing through
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Stories are paced after how long you're making it.
Can't write a Novel in the same way you'd write a 'Short-Story'.(I may be more of the Novelist)

Exactly! This...this is What?-Land and, apparently, I got on the wrong train. I know stories are based on pace; a story to rushed is not good, and a story to slow may not be well. It's okay for slow, but not to slow. Also, short stories apparently happen to be a common thing here. Apparently, 1-20 chapters are considered 'Short Stories' and anything above is a novel here.

for now, she is merely mentioned, if I will actually include her is for later.
I enjoy flutters, because she have a very good depth, you may have seen some of it?

Actually, I have. She's very in good depth, but I don't use her for stories like this for a very good reason: <A> Because readers will not like the idea, and <B> She will make readers confused and make her seem like she's the dead end to the story.

Manehattan is a convenient City,

No it isn't, Ponyville is. Not sure if you read most stories, but Manehatten is not convenient. It's only convenient if your OC lives there, but none other wise.

It's a 'Pinkamena' story, so I had her go out on a spree, in the spirit I interpretted only she could perform it. Trying to explore and make use of her Antics.

Or, you can get creative by saying that she's on a killing spree, but make it seem like someone else she (used to) cares about, or go wild and find a different way to make her seem like a violent killer! This bores me though, sorry.

Trying new ideas, that's what I like to do. why bother going, where everyone have already been?
who wil remember me, if I'm the last writing a story on the premis, and not being particularly bettwe then the once before me? These stories I can safely leave by th side of the road.

Try going with everyone for once. You never know when a creative spark might happen. For Example, my sister, FunnyFluttershy, wants to make a story , but her story is not getting the respect she deserves for going her own way. So when I told her to follow everyone, she had a creative spark, and creating a story that might catch everyone's attention. So, she took a detour, and decided to build her story from there.

Once in a while, try to go your way, but follow everyone else. Doing this will get some likes, and might make you a happy man.

I like to write 'complete' stories, even if I do write a few more thematic episode stories.
Guess it is a matter of if you enjoy how I blend the various components into a story?

Yes, it does. Anything that blends well will get your people to love you. Everything out of wack is considered either a Comedy, or just a plain ol' Troll Fic. Sure you haven't heard this?

Sure, I love complete stories, but some I abandon for a reason. Either It's not fitting in well, or I just have to. Two good reasons.

Two out of five, sounds like just below Average?
I hope it is worth trying to 'Salvage', from your perspective.

What? Don't like an honest answer?

And no, I'm not trying to 'Salvage', I'm being completely honest and truthful. Sorry if I hurt your feelings, but I'm being honest.

4199314 that IS a problem, I rarely follow the story through.
I have more 'completed' stories at Mibba, but they're commonly no longer.

I have other stories that are just as long as the once on this site,
but they either lack propper linkage to MLP, or have just escaped my interst in porting them here.

Too many of the stories wouldn't work on MLP.
I could find some that are more then the 20,000 words, and still are coherent/consistent.

Maybe 'Novelist' could be interpreted diffrently, in order to make more sense too?
One good reason why I moved over here is the friendly community, I get more and better feedback here.

4199401 my stories are commonly paced for a Novel.
all my Completed stories are less then that, less then 10 to be exact.

the reason to write her into the story, would be family.
I think I'd make her more of the 'Old' pegasus flutters, though.

a large City is easier to hide in, there is some Convenience, unless you like it solved?
in this case, the Twins live there, more ponies works to their advantage.
maybe more ponies aren't appelled by their feeding or appearence?
Aside from that, most of my stories would be Ponyville, with a few exetions.
I have used Cloudsdale and Vanhoover, aside from OC-ville(Unity)

in my so far only Pinkamena spree, only 2 are killed, and she didn't care for either.
both cases left an emotional crater, in the later case, I guess she helped it grow even bigger.
I placed the creativity in how she went about the deeds, including the MOs ..

'Try everything once', is what I'm doing. this is but the latest in the line of stories.
the line would be s long as my arm, if you look at all the stories.
De-Tour? I have a few ideas on making more people likeing the stories.
One is 'Changelings'. group choice is also important.
feeding starving charcters and/or ships probably could help some too?
There is always clop, I guess ..

so the better I can ballance my premies, the happier the readers/viewers will be.
I hope none of my stories will be viewed as 'Troll-fics', I have no interest in writing them.
I'm too serious about the story, while writing them. I'm putting too much of myself into them.

I guess I can try some commedy, I completed one marked for Dark and Commedy.

if you can catch an Apple to write the comments I'd be happy.
I've joined a few groups on the subject. (blunt Review)

Maybe my choice of words didn't catch you as intended?
2 out of 5 should be a story worth working on?
I can live with people7ponies hating my stories, at least so long as others enjoy them.
many of them are controversial, and not too much of Minstream?

I'm writing for the readers who are into what the premice is professing.(screw the world)
if the idea is good, but the execution isn't up to pare,(salvage)

4199668 Feeding Childeren? Yeah...for some reason, this only works when Scoot is around, as long as you can make that work. And Clop? Popular here. Like really, really popular.

Now, since I'm curious, I'm gonna take a look at your other stories.

Glad that your taking advice and mental notes down, but, as the Doctor use to say, ALLONS-Y!!

4199746 Spike fans are starved, by the looks, if you see where I'm hinting. shipping him is very popular among his fans, right?
ah yeah, feeding seems to be a fetish among some readers too.

I kind or specialised in 'Clop' originally. now I am writing oher stories too, naturally.

I have some 40+ stories on the page at this point. so you should have a selection to go over.

I've read enough of the Hilarity of those who refuse to take Advaice at the Ragers group.
Love to read their reviews from time to time, I just never get notifications and shus miss out as i is.
I'm on a few more groups like them too. I have submitted stories for their joy too.

4200698 does that mean you can ignore the rules?

4199348 ikr