Needs proof reading.

Paragraphs - you're doing it wrong.

Hoof Washer and Trixie are at the ponyvillle foster house for the unprivileged foal and Trixie like most celebrity Porn star want to help out.

I'm sorry. I can't...

I...

I think I'm done. This fic was hilarious.

You need to clean your description up. Badly. What? We're all thinking it! Among other things.

Came for the boobs, stayed for the hilarious typographical errors.

This would actually be a really great fic if it was a bit easier to read. Aside from the past, present, and future tenses all casually chilling in the same sentence, and a few unfortunately misspelled words, I must say the premise and story is intriguing.

Oh, and the ponies should deffo talk to each other more, but that's about it.

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All of you shut your whorse mouths. I've been waiting months for this fic to come out, don't you ruin it for me now.

4469627 sorry scootareader...

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Calm down. The author knows what he's doing. I've seen the other ones, and they continue to live on in all their reverse-gilded glory. These treasure troves aren't going anywhere.

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Shh shh shh... it's okay, we all make mistakes. Just clop to this like you've never clopped before and all will be forgiven.

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If you'd checked the comments sections of this guy's other two stories, you'd know I read everything he has. This includes all of his blog posts.

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Well, that escalated quickly. *drinks Coors*

Trixie being the same cape for the past twenty years and haven't change her look not one damn time, Not every one time. But she will change her look just this one night.

She one of those pony who like go the extra miles with her appearances.

she is assign to three different foal

The foals that is got to take with is a earth,a unicorn,and a Pegasus twins.

The Caretaker start lay on her back showing her crotchbreast

oh god

and twilight start to rub her crotchbreast against her

this is

and Trixie start to play with her while she watch twilight rubbing her crotchbreast against the caretaker

this is so

she got the position that was in before and start rubbing her crotchbreast against the caretaker crotchbreast like twilight

just so...

she interrupt by twilight who begin the another step to prep for the caretaker milking

wait what

The next step was to lick the nipple of the caretaker breast to tender the meat of her nip so it won't feel uncomfortable while they use they magic to milk her breast.

w-where did this boner come from

After a few minute of tongue licking and Mouth Sucking on her crotchbreast.

no boner stahp

The main event begin twilight and Trixie both use they magic to squeeze the breast of the caretaker.

no I am a reputable gentleman

Everytime they squeeze her boobs,the caretaker breathe so sensually and ahhs like she is in heaven.

I shan't succumb to such

it time to relaxed her with some toys and another naughty Accessories

such naughtiness

Twilight bring out some dildo and a butt plug for her and she magic to make a duplicate copy of her butt plug. Trixie and Twilight put they butt plug in they asses and they both put the dildo in the caretaker buttholes.

no hand what are you doing

They both start to thrust her slowly and they start to masturbate theyself.

what hand no

But after few momentary minutes of self-pleasure they start bring out some bigger guns (Cocks) Trixie and Twilight put on the strap-ons that twilight bring and they start to thrust into the Caretaker mouth,auns,and her vagina by force and personally.

this is not okay hand

Trixie take the vagina and Twilight take the mouth and the auns with her magic. Trixie and twilight was give the best powerness into the caretaker body and her desire.

hand he is misspelling anus as auns how can you dig that
stop it hand

.After each of they turn the caretaker squirt out sperm on each of they faces and they both lick a little off of they lips.

f-FUCK SPERM IS NOT A PART OF THE FEMALE ANATOMY
I CAN'T CLOP TO THIS

Either Trixie was embrass and realize the damage she had done but other than that she finally got the love she deserve.

Everypony deserves a happy ending.

You're Welcome

I didn't even have to say it.

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This guy is my favorite author.

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No need to be so rude.

4469706 okay...

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There is if you're insulting BlackAlifrickinzebra's work.

4471401 all I was saying that the description needed to be improved. And I was trying to be nice about it, too! If you want to know someone who would've insulted it, go talk to Barata or Parasprite!

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Well, maybe I will!
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*goes to bug Barata and parasprite about this fic*

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I kind of liked it. It was fun to read. And it has nice cover art.

I don't insult stories, Swordsman. I critique them. You, on the other hand, seem determined to insult other people, which is much worse. Please think about other peoples' feelings before you make comments about them.

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4476427 This is the internet, so expect feels to be hurts somewhere. Anyways, going to see if I can read this before getting back to sleep. Sadly, it seems Scootareader has already spoiled the story for me with the self-opinion of the story so g'night.