Liked the chapter, I feel like you went over board on AJ's lines, a mite bit hard to read the first time.

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I feel like you went over board on AJ's lines, a mite bit hard to read the first time.

Well ah reken that's just y'all's gersh-durned uhpinyun!

No, seriously though, I completely understand. It's hard to get the accent down without making it look like actual verbal diarrhea.

Please do not write out accents. It makes the text atrocious and annoying to read to the point where I started wondering if the section was important or if I could skip it. It also broke my immersion in the text because I started to think less about the story and more about the actual text/writing itself as I had to spend extra one figuring out what was actually being said.