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Worst. Parents. Ever.
Meh, It could have been worse.
Interestiing. Please read what you are writing typing out loud and ask yourself does it sound grammatically correct. I like the idea but I kept getting sidetracked by the incorrect grammar and spelling and continuity. Like cutting him with a kayaks sure and he doesn't get jailed.
I can't get agood description of the characters. I mean I do see the name and stuff but I have no idea what hair color they have or eye color and so on. But it very good I must say
Awsome
I was onto Iris the WHOLE time Owx!!!!!
*See downvotes in comment section*
Oh, that's never a good sign, let me just have a look at the stor-
Well, that's it.
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I take it theyre a bunch of rich assholes?
The like/dislike bar on this fic! It's like 2 trains going to crash on each other!
Gah! The grammar! It burns!!! I'm melting?! That's a thing?! Ah, well, I'll just keep rolling.
This story... regardless of your "explanation" of why the grammar is bad... can't be described simply. First off... you need an editor. Bad. Second... Playing on the whole "I've got a sword" cliche? Seriously? Are we 12? I haven't heard or seen anyone put a sword in the first chapter of a fanfiction in years though so I'm going to give you points for nostalgia value.
An entire family of bronies... I don't take issue with this. Knowing full well that your son has a crush on an animated horse and instead of berating him for hit just full on acceptance I kind of do... Parents have to have some sort of level head and need to tell a kid when they might be going a little to far regardless of how much you like something.
I expect to hear more about this evil sister but I suppose we won't because she isn't in the main 6 character plotline so that will just be another character to sit around being lonely.
Liked the whole idea of the brony bully because that kind of makes sense but at the same time... meh... what a dick.
Overall I'd give this story a 4/10 based on the first chapter. Find an editor and that score will get a lot better but I don't think I can bring myself to read the rest.
Wow.
Five or so paragraphs in and these guys are already Awesome McEvils.
I can already see all the twirling moustaches...