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65 chapters in and I'm loving it.
Biggest world wrecking issue I have is you have a terrible case of the said's. He said.she said.she said.she said.she said. Even though she asked a question, she said. Kills the moment between my favorite part of a story; dialogue.
Other than that I'm excited to find out more and catch up. Then wait chapter to chapter until you're done done.
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Thanks for the comment! I'm happy to hear you're enjoying it. I do know that I use "said" a lot, but I prefer that to possibly using too many colorful adjectives. "Exclaimed," "murmured," "barked," and so on, I find that those stall the dialogue because they draw my attention to the attributive when they might not need to. In my experience, I don't really even read the "he said" in other books; my eyes just kind of skate past it because I know what it is, I recognize the shape of that phrase on the page. I get what you're saying though, and I'll take it into consideration as I write further.