Twilight, whose nerves have been a bit strained lately for unexplained reasons, gets a special gift from Princess Celestia to help calm her down. However, what she receives in the mail isn't quite what she expected.
yeah i got that part but it sounds like dashie is warping her legs around twilight's legs because when you put an s on the end of someones name it usually indicates that it is theirs like joey's hammer
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs wrapping around the outside of Twilight's
to make it sound correct it should say
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs wrapping around the outside of Twilight or Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs spread to either side of twilight's legs i don't like the second one it doesn't sound right but you'l get the i dear
It was instantly more intimate than the last one as she slipped her tongue inside of Twilight's mouth right off the bat and swirled it around her own tongue
Just got some confirmation from Rasp, the cover artist I "hire", that the real cover art for this story will be ready around Friday. So the last chapter for the story will be coming out around the same time
4037489 Ahhh. I remember changing a few things around there. At first, I was going to put her going into her bathroom but I changed it around. I must've missed that part.
Also, I'm using "sex" in that phrase as a noun. So I think I think it's okay... I think If I get more comments on it, I'll change it
Cover artists: (1 month ago): "Yeah, I'll get right on that CB! I'll have it done in a couple of weeks (two weeks ago): "Sorry my PC crashed, I can't do shit for the next week and all my commissions are backed up now" (One week ago): "Hey, I can definately have it finished by friday!" Me: "Sweet!" (Today, friday): Announcement from cover artist's page on tumblr: "No livestream today, I'm going to take a day off"
................... Have patience, CB....
Sorry, everypony. I'll have the actual cover art up as soon as I get it!
One inch larger in diameter? I really hope you meant circumference (otherwise that's adding 6.28 inches to the circumference, half a foot more stretch would not be pleasant to anyone).
Other than the part about her hymen breaking (it shouldn't do that, after enough lubrication it stretches and it actually breaking is a sign of a lame partner or irresponsible toy use for the most part, which any well-educated person SHOULD know but for some reason nobody does) the entire thing was well-written and I didn't spot any typos or uncomfortable word choice.
Yay it's here!! Brb, reading.
Post-read: HOLY SHIT that ending I saw that coming a mile away (hehe, cum.) And still made me giggle like an idiot.
Author, ya did good. Damn good.
Will there be a third chapter? Or is the "Incomplete" a mistake?
i have read up to the box part and have had enough of reading for today
ps i think there is a giant dildo in the box
4025732 Nerp. Third chapter coming soon That'll be the last one
4029360 Aw... okay.
4030223 I'm sorry I just really wanna get back to Becoming One With The Beat
4030749 Understood. Every story must come to an end.
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs wrapping around the outside of Twilight's
ether this is a grammar error or dsahies legs are bendy as hell
4032120 Imagine someone sitting down on the edge of a bed and you're sitting behind them with your legs spread around them
yeah i got that part but it sounds like dashie is warping her legs around twilight's legs because when you put an s on the end of someones name it usually indicates that it is theirs like joey's hammer
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs wrapping around the outside of Twilight's
to make it sound correct it should say
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs wrapping around the outside of Twilight
or
Rainbow Dash sat up and instead of sitting next to her, sat right behind her with her legs spread to either side of twilight's legs
i don't like the second one it doesn't sound right but you'l get the i dear
OH GIANT DILDO NAILED IT
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA
dirty Luna
It was instantly more intimate than the last one as she slipped her tongue inside of Twilight's mouth right off the bat and swirled it around her own tongue
bat?
4032521 Right off the bat? You know that expression?
4032541 i do now
Oh Spike.....
Just got some confirmation from Rasp, the cover artist I "hire", that the real cover art for this story will be ready around Friday. So the last chapter for the story will be coming out around the same time
i just noticed that there is just over 5000 words of this story just for the sex scene it literally takes up the bulk of the story
4036731 Yup. That was the intention
4037489 Ahhh. I remember changing a few things around there. At first, I was going to put her going into her bathroom but I changed it around. I must've missed that part.
Also, I'm using "sex" in that phrase as a noun. So I think I think it's okay... I think If I get more comments on it, I'll change it
Thanks for the help
4033150
Problem?
Go kid!!!
4039991 Ahh! Your picture scared meh
4041885 WELL ITS ALWAYS WATCHNG YOU!
Cover artists:
(1 month ago): "Yeah, I'll get right on that CB! I'll have it done in a couple of weeks
(two weeks ago): "Sorry my PC crashed, I can't do shit for the next week and all my commissions are backed up now"
(One week ago): "Hey, I can definately have it finished by friday!" Me: "Sweet!"
(Today, friday): Announcement from cover artist's page on tumblr: "No livestream today, I'm going to take a day off"
...................
Have patience, CB....
Sorry, everypony. I'll have the actual cover art up as soon as I get it!
One inch larger in diameter? I really hope you meant circumference (otherwise that's adding 6.28 inches to the circumference, half a foot more stretch would not be pleasant to anyone).
Very good story otherwise.
Other than the part about her hymen breaking (it shouldn't do that, after enough lubrication it stretches and it actually breaking is a sign of a lame partner or irresponsible toy use for the most part, which any well-educated person SHOULD know but for some reason nobody does) the entire thing was well-written and I didn't spot any typos or uncomfortable word choice.
Forgive me if I missed something, but I thought the package came from Luna.
God dammit that double ended dildo was hot!